Aristocrat,

You were going so good. If you could only have continued like that! Saray points de k end pe aap ne keh dia progress ka is se taluq he nahi. Saari raat rotay rahay aur mara koi bhi nahi wala muhaawra hogya! The bold part is totally irrelevant and agar ap fail hue (which is a chance, as this is year of the essay) to isi liye haun ge. Acha bhala essay khud he bigar dia. Good luck anyway

Nazish Hina
Your points 1,2, and 3 are totally irrelevant. If this is essay year, you are also in the danger zone. Besides, your outline is not self explanatory. Good luck though.