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Originally Posted by Communist View Post
My attempt, without the use of first person.

The contemporary civilization does not know how to get benefit from knowledge and science. Machines are meant to serve humans. However, the opposite is becoming a reality. Machines need good maintenance otherwise, they do not work. Due to increased dependence of man on machines, machines might rule the humans in future.
You have skipped few things.
1- Paragraph is of 205 words. You should make a precis of 205/3 =69 or 70.
2- Your précis contains 51 words.
3- You have skipped some points of the paragraph for example, science has given us powers to become master we don't use them in proper manner, and machines need to get fed up etc. Also Author is not taking about contemporary civilization. He is taking generally.

My Prices is:
PRECIS: Dependency on Machine.

We don’t know what to do with knowledge. Science has given us powers, yet we don’t know how to use them. Machines require proper management or maintenance and to get fed up. If we don’t do they refuse to work and cause destruction. We became so dependent on machine that we don’t feel comfortable to do anything without them. In the course of time they may become our master and rule us.

Do you have any suggestion for me?
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