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Originally Posted by psas
The end of traditional democracy is the dignity and worth of an individual. It believes in persuasion, fraternal good-will, love of truth, and overall welfare and happiness. On the other hand, the ends of democracy are rational and humane values for which it uses least force and maximum voluntary assent. We may stick to democracy without renouncing our faith which enshrines traditional democracy. There are numerous issues with democracy but still it can be employed because it gives us suitable conditions to ensure the dignity and worth of the individual through minimum force and free will.
Note: A critical appraisal will be appreciated.
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Using the phrase "the end" in the beginning gives a double meaning, should have avoided it. And later in the 3rd sentence why have you used "on the other hand" when its the same idea being conveyed. Moreover, the word limit given was 80(I guess), and in that case you have crossed it by 16 words, which can turn out to be fatal.