Quote:
Originally Posted by chmobeenafzal
Asalam O Aliekum !
i love my beautiful country because we call it motherland and everybody loves his mother. Nowadays many terrorists and criminals try to afraid the people of our country but they can't because our countries motto is faith,unity,discipline and Faith in ALLAH is our belief so He is the only king who give us life and we will return it to him. One day INSHAALLAH I will become a CSP and serve my country in a better way.
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Brother, here, i offer some reviews. Paragraph is really good in grammar except some minor mistakes i would say (which would be gone by practice):
First, "Nowadays
(,) many terrorists and criminals try to
afraid (replace it by words like, terrorize/fighten/cause fear or other) the people of our country
(,) but they can't because our countries motto is faith,unity
and discipline
. Faith in ALLAH is our belief so He is the only king who give
(s) us life and we will return it to him. One day
, INSHAALLAH
, I will become a CSP and serve my country in a better way".
Try to write short sentences give full-stop where it needs.
Rest of members can point out if i missed a spot.
P.S.: InshaAllah, you will become!