Brother, let me offer my review:
First of all, use numbers/alphabets for sub-points. It will be convenient. Make your outline more appealing it will be easier to asses.
second, "Causes of women backwardness" where, Pakistan or globally?


"• Religious Causes:" (It can't be first a cause, because globally there are certain socioeconomic and political reasons at play and also most of countries are secular setting aside Islamic world and few. Since, FPSC demands all thoughts be arranged logically).

"-Negative role of so-called religious leaders." (there are certain religious leaders who exhibit positive role. Plus, since the topic is unclear whether it refers to globally or Pakistan.Therefore, It can be counter argued that certain countries are secular, yet women there are backward, how would justify then? Align your topic with your arguments under religious heading)

"-Misinterpretation of religious injunctions." (This point correlate with your above negative role...point. Rephrase it).

"- Less consideration of Ijtihad in Muslim states." (this is valid argument)

"- Poor of insufficient legislation." (Rephrase it, grammatically incorrect)

"- Illiteracy of men." (How would you justify it? Are men/individuals to be blamed only, not the social construct? Are women more literate than men worldwide? statistics does not support it. Better rephrase it or use uncontroversial and clear stances. Since it can be counter argued concretely).

"- Taboos, customs, and traditions." (Ambiguous)

"- Security issues." (How? i understand your idea but the heading is pretty much blurry to know what you are trying to convey. Be more specific and cautious in headings/words.)

"• Economic causes
- Poverty at domestic level.
- Budgetary constraint at the national level.
- Lack of economic opportunity" (These sound good)

Hope it helps!