Originally Posted by aishalam

The last set of edits and comments below.


There is a need that the governments ought to be ("should be" or "should work at being better prepared" sound better in the flow of the sentence) well-prepared for all possible situations that will emerge after containment of the novel virus.(This paragraph as a whole needs a better linkage to the previous thread. It just sorts of starts out of nowhere.) That will equally be full of risks("difficulties" or "its own set of problems" would make more sense). The governments should make a sound plan for tackling the economic jolts, rehabilitation of affected persons and providing jobs or stipends to the jobless youth. The government should consider providing stipends along with technical or digital skills so that they may start their own businesses or for freelancing. In the digital era, online freelancing on platforms like Upwork and Fiverr are in much demand and are excellent opportunities. If the government equips youth with these requisite skills, the jobless("unemployed" is a better word) youth may earn sufficient revenue from these platforms. Presidential Initiative for Artificial Intelligence & Computing (PIAIC) is an important step in this regard. However, keeping in view the pressing situation such programmes ought to be tailored for the jobless Pakistani youth for the post-Covid19 time. Moreover, other technical skills such as mechanic, electrician, etc. for the uneducated youth should also be preferred in this respect. The more we plan to engage our youth, the better it is in view of the hard-pressed times ahead. (the thing is talking so much about the unemployed youth does not suit the tone of the essay before this at all. You have discussed the cultural changes, security issues and also crime rates. These are not directly linked to such a specific group as unemployed youth so giving them such a disproportionately large space in this sort of recommendations paragraph does not makes much sense. Tailor the recommendations to the concerns and issues raised previously in the essay so that the reader know that you aren't just pointing fingers but can not only see the problems in their proper contexts but also have suggestions on how tackle them.)


Coronavirus is a cataclysmic occurrence of this century which has potential to change everything for ever ("forever" together) entailing vastly ("and will entail vast" ) pernicious effects. The more aggressive efforts are taken to contain it, the better it is (remove. End on better). In addition, the more we prepare for adopting in the post-Covid19 time, the less problematic would it be. (" it will be") Nonetheless, the central government need to take holistic efforts in coordination with the provincial governments for both current-and-post-Covid19 period and not to take solo flight as witnessed during lockdown situation. It created more confusion than helped to contain the crisis. (the last sentence lacks a sense of conclusion and finality. Add something that ties it all together. And if nothing else always end on a positive or hopeful note. It just gives a better impression.)