Para 1
In economics, inflation is a general increase in the prices of goods and services in an economy. Inflation is commonly experienced all over the world nowadays.*There is high inflation in Pakistan these days. In Pakistan, every regime has been taking loans from IMF, ADB and different countries so as to run the country since much too long ago.

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Inflation has become a common global experience. Pakistan is no exception.

The last statement about regime loans is misplaced. A new idea popped up in your head, but how was it related to inflation? The connection wasn't made and a skip to a new para ensued. Avoid this.

What could have been done instead is: Among its reasons include the painful terms and conditions that come with IMF bailouts which successive regimes have sought.

Para 2

Economy of Pakistan can’t have been stablized by the regimes ever since whoever came on power causing them to avail loans in every tenure for far too long. These are the stipulations by IMF, ADB*to increase prices and end subsidies on*oil, electricity and other things for current regime causing high inflation in Pakistan.


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cant have been stabilised?ever since...for far too long?
Please use fewer words to explain your point. this will make it easy to understand and void of errors.

What you meant was: The inability of successive regimes to stabilise the economy lead them towards loans. It seems to turn into a habit.

By the way, you could have directly started your paragraph with the painful conditions imposed by IMF because your last Para ended on that note. Alas, you chose to move to a new point, instead of continuing where you left. Moreover, in the second line of this para you come back to the point where you left your 1st paragraph!!!

Para 3

Inflation will increase much again, when government imposes*tariffs as much as they can. Regime will recover loan installments from its folks through tariffs. Like other government employees, free oil should be halted to be given to high ups by government in Pakisan. In case, regime doesn’t do it, other government employees should likewise be given oil free.

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Inflation will increase(no much, no again).
as much as they can?no need. Simply say: as givernment imposes tariffs and new taxes.
How come perks of the employees come into this paragraph, when you were talking about imposing taxes? You were talking about raising revenues, in the next you are talking about curbing expenditures. Two different things! And secondly, improve on language used.


free oil? It is called Fuel quota.
Halted?The word usage is wrong plus Do not take extreme positions! You may say revised or (extreme cases) removed.

And then you say that other employees should be given free oil instead?!!!I thought this paragraph was about inflation, taxation and curbing expenditures!

Para

To halt taking loans, keep interest rate upto 6%, not to let currency rupee be devalued, control dollar, allocate subsidies, and to lower tariffs’ amount will abudantly help control inflation in Pakistan.*

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There are totally not acceptable! These are economic decisions made from situation to situation. You cannot keep a fixed rate. More so, you have also given a number to it!Fatal! It shows that you are not an economics student, so kindly do not punch above your weight. Try to give suggestions that are general instead.

Good luck. Hope you improve