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From the early days of its life it comes home to the heart of a child that his mare of chocolates and candies can go only with the help of money.
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1. From the early days of
his life
, it comes home to the heart of a child that his mare of chocolates and candies can go only with the help of money.
Always insert comma after an introductory phrase or an adverbial clause preceding the main clause.
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As he becomes older his needs become greater eventually demanding more and more money and thus engrossing all his efforts around a single point of increasing his monetary stocks.
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2. As he becomes older
, his needs become greater eventually demanding more and more money
; thus, engrossing all his efforts around a single point of increasing his monetary stocks.
For comma, reason stated in 1.
Insert semicolon before transitional connectives (conjuctive adverbs: however, thus, therefore, furthermore and blah blah) separating two independent clauses.
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From cradle to grave man’s hankering for wealth never ends.
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3. From cradle to grave
, man’s hankering for wealth never ends.
Reason stated in 1.
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Money is, no doubt, a miracle. It endows us with happiness, wipes our tears, soothes our wounds, makes our life mirthful and rosy, gives us laughter and joy and changes our dreams to reality.
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4. Money is, no doubt, a miracle. It endows us with happiness, wipes our tears, soothes our wounds, makes our life mirthful and rosy, gives us laughter and joy
, and changes our dreams to reality.
With two "ands", the reader may get confused, so you need the comma after the last item in the series before the conjunction - joy.
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In the eyes of the world a rich man is wise man.
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5. In the eyes of the world
, a rich man is wise man.
Reason stated in 1.
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The golden key of money opens up even the trickiest locks of troubles thus rightfully giving its owner the prestige of being intelligent.
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6. The golden key of money opens up even the trickiest locks of troubles
; thus
, rightfully giving its owner the prestige of being intelligent.
Reason stated in 2.
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Money has the seductive sting of engulfing all of our attention and abilities and at the end man becomes the epitome of the picture presented in the holy scriptures in the words of: ‘Although they posses more and more than enough yet they yearn for more’.
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7. Money has the seductive sting of engulfing all of our attention and abilities
, and
, at the end
, man becomes the epitome of the picture presented in the holy scriptures in the words of: ‘Although they posses more and more than enough yet they yearn for more’.
As per my knowledge, 'at the end' is an introductory phrase in the sentence so comma should be inserted - one before it and the other after it.
Due to paucity of time and knowledge, I only found these errors. I'll post-mortem the other one later. 