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Originally Posted by Saleeqa Batool
Seniors:Please comment on the expansion of the cited subject, given below.

Learn to walk before you run


There is no royal road to success rather its culmination of gradual but persistent struggle. The idea of achieving milestone overnight may deem fit in fable and fictions but not in the world of reality. Accomplishment of any task in real life requires certain steps to be followed in logical and gradual manner that lead to the destination. As one cannot enjoy mastery of a language unless have learnt the alphabet, the same way no one can be the adept runner without developing the ability to walk first.

Life has become overwhelmingly systematic and calculated in contemporary age. The researches conducted in the areas of Humanities and Management has enlightened the Man to devise a well planed, disciplined and strategic approach for achievement of goals. In this process every step carries huge importance and doing away with any of it may cause failure.

One must be armed with essential skills, experience and knowledge in order to perform effectively and efficiently. Getting responsible positions through back-stair influence without having experience and skills always remain unjust to the respective role.

Over ambitious minds, some time, strive to realize the dreams in wee time using shortcuts but this approach leads to failure as there is no shortcut to success.

While turning the pages of history it can be realized that those who touched the zenith of majesty, achieved milestones by persistent and valiant struggle throughout the life. These shining stars of history started from scratch and struggled long to become part of galaxy. Following the footsteps of these role models; it is imperative for the contemporaries to pursue the route with steady but persistent struggle without looking for shortcuts.
overall nice attempt
i colored the parts that contain errors or don't make accurate sense
avoid repetition of words, change the language if you're repeating ideas
try to put one or two quotes as well
be more careful with the usage of vocabulary

all the best.

regards,
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