Even though I am not a senior member in this forum but still let me commend on your tremendous effort. Your essay is very well written, the only humble suggestion I would make to you is that please expand on remedies, your essay mostly focuses on the causes of poverty, that part of essay is very abstract, it is merely explaining facts, in order to get higher marks, you will have to show analytical skills, and I believe you can get marks in the higher bracket if you can adopt analytical and critical approach.

Overall, one of the best original essay I have seen on this forum.