Your essay is just test less from school level we are hearing these issues and there remedies.
Competetive exam need sumthing different novice,unique,outstandin.
Just try to gather current burning issues,read articles,improve ur english standard,and as u emphasise again n again on goverment and america thats negative approach.and when u can define every problem than u must know its solution thats y sum members insist over remedies.
Don't take it as discouraging i'm for your betterment.
