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Terrorism is a curse. Since the start of Anti-terror campaigns, an overall sense of uncertainty has prevailed in the country and it is at its peak in NWFP and FATA. It has contributed to capital decline in economic activities by making foreign investors jittery.

It has (omit has, looks more natural) emerged in different countries for different reasons to accomplish, but the cases behind their inception were identical such as poverty, unemployment, injustice, corruption etc But still the questions arises (arise) that What are the factors responsible for boosting terrorism? What are the impacts of terrorism on Pakistan’s economy? And What remedies should be opted to axe the roots of terrorism?, that is what varies from country to country.

Pakistan have (has) to take effective steps to expunge the (omit the article) terrorism by ensuring justice, promoting education, rising employment opportunities and development of channel of communication. It has become necessary for Pakistan to take prompt actions and adopt strategies to save the future of Pakistan.

Quaid-e-Azam said, “ Pakistan is (omit is) came into being to remain forever”

What is Terrorism?

Terrorism is a (an) art of demanding at own prescribed rules from the (omit the article, because any is not specific) any government or authority. However, it is believed that so far not any single definition is came into light through majority (omit, consensus means majority) consensus. A person fighting for independence carries two labels for same actions such as He/she is a freedom fighter or a liberator and a terrorist, at a (article the shud be used ) same time for different people.

Islam is not a (an) origin of terrorism, it is mere a propaganda by the western media. If we look back into the history, we found (use find instead) from 1941-1948, 249 terrorist acts are recorded which are committed by Jewish Organization notably “Stunt Gangs” followed by Ignor and Hegna. Similarly, In Germany – “Badar Hof Gang”, In Italy – “Red Brigade”, and in Pakistan – “Al-Qaeda” and “Tehrek-i-Taliban”.
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Former president, Pervaiz Musharraf inked in his book “The line of fire” (its in the line of fire) that,” The period of Zia and Soviet invasion in Afghanistan was the inception of Taliban in Pakistan”.
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There are many more mistakes in your essay. I don't have that much time to read it all. So please learn from the mistakes you have made.
p.s never use the definite article "the" before a country except the united states, the UK etc

regards

waqarj

Last edited by Andrew Dufresne; Saturday, January 02, 2010 at 11:45 AM.
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