@Kawish

A nice attempt. However it seems as if you are focusing more on impact of extremism on Pakistan's economy. I would recommend you to write on the lines I have posted to your query somewhere else. Some additional guidelines (although you have incorporated some of the factors I am writing below, but I am giving extra hints) :

1. Power and gas loadshedding and its impact on industrial output.
2. Food crisis
3. Mismanagement of economy (Monetary and Fiscal)
4. Persistent trade deficit
5. Budget deficit
6. IMF and World Bank's conditions for aid and their impact on Pakistan's economy (To remind you that IMF and World Bank conditions basically require us to reduce trade and budget deficit and have a smaller government role in economy i.e. more privatization)

Some points that you can delete or modify:

1. Climate change (I dont know how you are going to relate this to economy, although it has a bad effect on our economy in the long rum but this effect will not be limited to us rather it would affect whole world)
2. Pledge of friends of Pakistan (I highly doubt this aid, in simple words it is zabani jama kharch. It is because countries dont give aid to correct our balance of payments and reduce our budget deficit)
3. International protectionism rising (I dont know how you can say that, if you can elaborate I would be thankful)
4. Consciousness of government (hahahaha)
5. Multi polar world (Dont know how you can relate this to our economy)
6. You can lump together three headings i.e.
a. Pakistan war on terrorism
b. Proxy war between India and Pakistan in Afghanistan
c. Indian propaganda against Pakistan (I am not sure how this is going to affect our economy)

It would be much better to post a complete essay where reader can assess your essay.

Regards