@Mohammad Ashfaq
A very nice attempt. Smooth flow of ideas (a scarce commodity found in beginners). I really liked your essay.
However some observations:
1. You tend to write long sentences. Try to make it shorter.
For example consider this sentence, "During the course of history judiciary received serious blows which made it unresponsive to protect constitution, bring the culprits to justice, take suo moto actions to immediately address anomalies, interpret the constitution , reign in the access of powers by other institutions, mitigate the people grievances and protect the basic rights of people".
Although it is coherent but still long one.
2. Try to avoid sentences like this, "By having an independent judiciary it will serve as a custodian of human rights, provide means for rule of law not man....".
The last part of the sentence i.e. "NOT MAN", doesnt look better. Avoid it.
3. Try not to repeat same ideas.
Keep it up.
Regards
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