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Originally Posted by nickfury
Very well written, excellent use of grammar and the facts. Good job.
I pointed out a few changes, check them out plus something i noted was "right" and "right" try to change the right/wrong Right to something else, doesn't sound so good to me for your call.
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The changes you have pinpointed are considerable. I am glad someone did it. It increased my pleasure to notice that no grammatical error was identified which in turn may employ that the discourse above doesn't contain one. Nevertheless, the linguistic and specifically stylistic suggestions made by you are praiseworthy. I will take care of these in future write-ups.
