Thread: Plz critically evaluate this expansion
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Originally Posted by mussaa View Post
mistakes:
1) heap of vocabulary
2) Unable to grab and explain the meaning and basic theme of quotation
3) It seems that it is an essay written about strength
4) Then it seems like it is an essay about how people achieved greatness
5) ideas are not in a rhythm
6) repetition of points
7) No need of phrases
8) examples quoted are not relevant
Itni saari mistakes...mjhay to laga tha main ne bohat achhi expansion likhi hai okay main dobara likhti hoon lekin ye vocabulary ka kya problem hai mjhay samjh nahi aya. vocab suitable nahi hai ya kya. heap of vocab matlab zada kese hai?? unfamiliar words hain?? or ghalat vocab use ki hai???
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