sorry to say i couldnt find future in this essay which seems to be bright.
topic is not the failure of democracy it is the futre of democracy

you remained very pessimistic in this essay you need to be more optimistic.

you can start like this
future of democracy is bright in pakistan by exactly hitting the target.

you can give million of arguments to prove that the future of democracy is bright in pakistan

like

media has assumed the role of watch dog instead of lapdog.
2. non intervention of military
3.present govt first time in the history going to complete its tenure.
4. the present tussle among the institutions in pak is the classic example of situation in a flux where power weilding institutions are trying to seek new place before the settlement of new power equilibrium.
5. staus quo is changing

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i think optimistic view would be more safe. isnt it?