dear
it was a good attempt .... keep it up and one thing i noticed in you essay was lacking of transition .... in your introduction you need a particular stance .i.e. motivator to attract the reader.... so add some attracting facts and figures apart from going into a particular period of history like you mention 1990s n so on.... you really don,t know who will check your essay.... as per i have a litle knwldge... regards
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