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Old Sunday, October 09, 2016
Farhan ak Farhan ak is offline
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Bravo! Nice outline yet i feel you have incessantly overused the words "lemon" and "lemonade". Reading your outline, i felt you took these words way too literally at so many places, which affects your overall expression negatively. The proverb just sends out a message that you have to pick up and paint a picture of our lives keeping that in mind.
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