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[MisbahMalik]

Hello members,

I am sharing a small piece of writing.

Kindly comment on my writing style for CA and Essay paper.

Here is the link: Sovereignty

Regards.

[Sureshlasi]

Originally Posted by MisbahMalik

Hello members,

I am sharing a small piece of writing.

Kindly comment on my writing style for CA and Essay paper.

Here is the link: Sovereignty

Regards.

Well, The attempt you devise to emphasis over the Soverenity and relevent issues can be catched but the introduction to the subject is less appropriate for exam point of view. It fails to catch any attention at first. The introduction
must be very alluring. You can broach your writing by rising the question about Sovereignty of the nation that how aware we are about it.

Secondly, on few point I miss the link. Consequently I feel to read lines simualtaneously. The flow should go through point to point. There should not be any devious sequence. Like one event should be revealed after another event.

It is obviously recommended to write as simple as possible that a layman can easily understand it. Your writing is simple but punctuation is still very compulsory when you are writing for exam.

It takes few minutes the intro begins and conclusion strike. I miss to read any part of essay body. It was unexpectedly concise.

I did not pay much heed on grammar but still in last paragraph the expression was puzzled in two tenses past then present. It's just a min analysis. Hope I ll see more from your side.

Best of luck!!

Allah nagheban,

[MisbahMalik]

Originally Posted by Sureshlasi

Well, The attempt you devise to emphasis over the Soverenity and relevent issues can be catched but the introduction to the subject is less appropriate for exam point of view. It fails to catch any attention at first. The introduction
must be very alluring. You can broach your writing by rising the question about Sovereignty of the nation that how aware we are about it.

Secondly, on few point I miss the link. Consequently I feel to read lines simualtaneously. The flow should go through point to point. There should not be any devious sequence. Like one event should be revealed after another event.

It is obviously recommended to write as simple as possible that a layman can easily understand it. Your writing is simple but punctuation is still very compulsory when you are writing for exam.

It takes few minutes the intro begins and conclusion strike. I miss to read any part of essay body. It was unexpectedly concise.

I did not pay much heed on grammar but still in last paragraph the expression was puzzled in two tenses past then present. It's just a min analysis. Hope I ll see more from your side.

Best of luck!!

Allah nagheban,

Actually this write-up was not intentionally written for CSS paper point of view. After posting it, I thought to take comments on my casual writing style.

Yeah, I need to work on punctuation. Your comment finally made me to go for it at first hand.

If it is recommended to write simple English for layman in Essay & CA then what is the use of vocabulary in CSS? Do I still need to build up my vocabulary?

Surely, I will be back with a new writing for comments. Thanks for the kind review sir!

[marilatif]

Originally Posted by MisbahMalik

Actually this write-up was not intentionally written for CSS paper point of view. After posting it, I thought to take comments on my casual writing style.

Yeah, I need to work on punctuation. Your comment finally made me to go for it at first hand.

If it is recommended to write simple English for layman in Essay & CA then what is the use of vocabulary in CSS? Do I still need to build up my vocabulary?

Surely, I will be back with a new writing for comments. Thanks for the kind review sir!

Miss as suresh lasi has pointed out your introduction is not appropriate and according to the needed principles of essay writing. Secondly, addressing someone in essay, as you have pointed out to the COAS, is again not encouraged. Furthermore, as dear suresh has already pointed out that there is no need of writing difficult words in essay, so i second his opinion that you must write simple words so that even a lay man can understand. But as you asked that if you wrote simple words in essay then what is need of developing vocabulary. Miss vocabulary development is an integral part of css preparation. since, to qualify composition paper, you must have a rich vocabulary. There is a five marks question on antonym and synonym, which requires vocabulary, without it You cant comprehend the paragraph to make the precise. A question on reading comprehension also needs strong vocabulary. Last but not the least, without vocabulary it will be extremely difficult to understand the long question being asked in papers like current affairs, pakistan affairs and Islamiat.

However, as you have said that it was just a casual write up, so by considering this point of view, i believe, it was a good attempt. since, grammatical and spelling mistakes are negligible. Moreover, writing style is also not below the standard level.


hope you have understood my point of view.

Regards

[MisbahMalik]

Originally Posted by marilatif

Miss as suresh lasi has pointed out your introduction is not appropriate and according to the needed principles of essay writing. Secondly, addressing someone in essay, as you have pointed out to the COAS, is again not encouraged. Furthermore, as dear suresh has already pointed out that there is no need of writing difficult words in essay, so i second his opinion that you must write simple words so that even a lay man can understand. But as you asked that if you wrote simple words in essay then what is need of developing vocabulary. Miss vocabulary development is an integral part of css preparation. since, to qualify composition paper, you must have a rich vocabulary. There is a five marks question on antonym and synonym, which requires vocabulary, without it You cant comprehend the paragraph to make the precise. A question on reading comprehension also needs strong vocabulary. Last but not the least, without vocabulary it will be extremely difficult to understand the long question being asked in papers like current affairs, pakistan affairs and Islamiat.

However, as you have said that it was just a casual write up, so by considering this point of view, i believe, it was a good attempt. since, grammatical and spelling mistakes are negligible. Moreover, writing style is also not below the standard level.


hope you have understood my point of view.

Regards

Great! This was the review I was looking for. Next time I’ll come up with a short write up for Essay.

I got two things from your post:

1) I should not impress the Essay examiner with my insane vocabulary.
2) I should go with technical words for CA, PA & Islamiat paper.


Would you like to point out grammatical & spelling mistakes in the post?

[marilatif]

Originally Posted by MisbahMalik

Great! This was the review I was looking for. Next time I’ll come up with a short write up for Essay.

I got two things from your post:

1) I should not impress the Essay examiner with my insane vocabulary.
2) I should go with technical words for CA, PA & Islamiat paper.


Would you like to point out grammatical & spelling mistakes in the post?

miss i have already told you there is hardly any grammatical and spelling mistake in your write up. so no need to worry about. you need to improve what we have already pointed out. Rest is all fine. and i clearly see a shining spirit in you.

Regards