My Unpublished Articles (for Essay & Current Aff) plz Comment

ssara · #1 Friday, July 27, 2012

I have made a strategy to write an article on the daily basis which I have to post it into CSSFORUM, and for Dawn newspaper... And you all members are requested to comment on my Articles. The articles which I have to post, will be regarding Current Affairs and Essay's perspective. I hope you would have been getting facts and figures as well.. InshALLAH I will be posting it on the daily basis. You are all requested to comment and criticize it fully as much as u can. I will appreciate.. ...........Thanks.

ssara · #2 Friday, July 27, 2012

Date: Juldy 27,2012
The apex of abysmal terrorism is still upholding overwhelmingly
Since a decade owing to the apex of abysmal terrorism, our country has been suffered a lot terribly. Day by day the terrorism is going to its obscure apex and has killed 35,00 people. Among them 5000 were of law enforcement personnel. On the other hand, Pakistan’s economy has been affected about an estimated $67 owing the damage of the material. Besides, according the estimated, 2% growth rate of Pakistan, what for country of fiscal population of 180 million turns out to be roughly around 3.2 million every year. Consequently, it is a big gouge to the economy of our country and it has become the biggest hurdle for diverse fields to progress exclusively. However, In 2004 our army indicated the Al-Qaida members in the mountain area of Waziristan on the Afghanistan border, owing to the persuade of Al-Qaida, a little mountain erupted in form of a conflict between Islamic militants and local tribesmen, a war became started from Waziristan. Later on a short truce, known as the Waziristan accord, was brokered in September 2006, which indicated Pakistan’s reluctance to fight Islamic Militant. Owing to war on terror, Pakistan has nearly lost her pelf and prestige because in the world whenever any sort of terrorists and extremists activities take place, without investigating, the whole world use to look over to the country of Pakistan and is considered the link with Pakistan. Unfortunately, Pakistan has nearly lost her name and fame owing to the said conundrum. However, it is the time for our current government to speculate over this obscure issue and device an effective strategy to tackle this problem and prevent it as soon as possible.

Abbas Yasin · #3 Friday, July 27, 2012

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Originally Posted by ssara

Date: Juldy 27,2012
The apex of abysmal terrorism is still upholding overwhelmingly
Since a decade owing to the apex of abysmal terrorism, our country has been suffered a lot terribly. Day by day the terrorism is going to its obscure apex and has killed 35,00 people. Among them 5000 were of law enforcement personnel. On the other hand, Pakistan’s economy has been affected about an estimated $67 owing the damage of the material. Besides, according the estimated, 2% growth rate of Pakistan, what for country of fiscal population of 180 million turns out to be roughly around 3.2 million every year. Consequently, it is a big gouge to the economy of our country and it has become the biggest hurdle for diverse fields to progress exclusively. However, In 2004 our army indicated the Al-Qaida members in the mountain area of Waziristan on the Afghanistan border, owing to the persuade of Al-Qaida, a little mountain erupted in form of a conflict between Islamic militants and local tribesmen, a war became started from Waziristan. Later on a short truce, known as the Waziristan accord, was brokered in September 2006, which indicated Pakistan’s reluctance to fight Islamic Militant. Owing to war on terror, Pakistan has nearly lost her pelf and prestige because in the world whenever any sort of terrorists and extremists activities take place, without investigating, the whole world use to look over to the country of Pakistan and is considered the link with Pakistan. Unfortunately, Pakistan has nearly lost her name and fame owing to the said conundrum. However, it is the time for our current government to speculate over this obscure issue and device an effective strategy to tackle this problem and prevent it as soon as possible.

Thats a good effort by you. And will give you and many other aspairents encouragement.
One thing which i found in this topic is that you must follow pattern, like what's about Topic i.e describe or define first with detail about it, then describe why started i.e main reasons of occuring, which agencies supporting it, then property damage and human lossnes, then give your suggestions about controlling it and how. then end up with specific words.

tobabar · #4 Friday, July 27, 2012

You have written updated figures. It is well done, impressive vocabulary is used. From your beginning it is well written but you have not mentioned remedies that how government has to deal this problem. But over all well written. Keep it up.

Good Luck

jillia89 · #5 Saturday, July 28, 2012

I 'll 2nd Abbas here..
n Keep it up sis, wish you all the best.

Miss Ayaz · #6 Saturday, July 28, 2012

good effort...

Arslan Shaukat · #7 Saturday, July 28, 2012

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Originally Posted by ssara

Date: Juldy 27,2012
The apex of abysmal terrorism is still upholding overwhelmingly
Since a decade owing to the apex of abysmal terrorism, our country has been suffered a lot terribly. Day by day the terrorism is going to its obscure apex and has killed 35,00 people. Among them 5000 were of law enforcement personnel. On the other hand, Pakistans economy has been affected about an estimated $67 owing the damage of the material. Besides, according the estimated, 2% growth rate of Pakistan, what for country of fiscal population of 180 million turns out to be roughly around 3.2 million every year. Consequently, it is a big gouge to the economy of our country and it has become the biggest hurdle for diverse fields to progress exclusively. However, In 2004 our army indicated the Al-Qaida members in the mountain area of Waziristan on the Afghanistan border, owing to the persuade of Al-Qaida, a little mountain erupted in form of a conflict between Islamic militants and local tribesmen, a war became started from Waziristan. Later on a short truce, known as the Waziristan accord, was brokered in September 2006, which indicated Pakistans reluctance to fight Islamic Militant. Owing to war on terror, Pakistan has nearly lost her pelf and prestige because in the world whenever any sort of terrorists and extremists activities take place, without investigating, the whole world use to look over to the country of Pakistan and is considered the link with Pakistan. Unfortunately, Pakistan has nearly lost her name and fame owing to the said conundrum. However, it is the time for our current government to speculate over this obscure issue and device an effective strategy to tackle this problem and prevent it as soon as possible.

Dear Sara!

Nearly 35000 people have been killed by terrorism uptill now. Not 3500.

Your imagination is good but please try to focus on sentence structure as well.

Regards,

pearlyS · #8 Saturday, July 28, 2012

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Originally Posted by ssara

Date: Juldy 27,2012
The apex of abysmal terrorism is still upholding overwhelmingly
Since a decade owing to the apex of abysmal terrorism, our country has been suffered a lot terribly. Day by day the terrorism is going to its obscure apex and has killed 35,00 people. Among them 5000 were of law enforcement personnel. On the other hand, Pakistan’s economy has been affected about an estimated $67 owing the damage of the material. Besides, according the estimated, 2% growth rate of Pakistan, what for country of fiscal population of 180 million turns out to be roughly around 3.2 million every year. Consequently, it is a big gouge to the economy of our country and it has become the biggest hurdle for diverse fields to progress exclusively. However, In 2004 our army indicated the Al-Qaida members in the mountain area of Waziristan on the Afghanistan border, owing to the persuade of Al-Qaida, a little mountain erupted in form of a conflict between Islamic militants and local tribesmen, a war became started from Waziristan. Later on a short truce, known as the Waziristan accord, was brokered in September 2006, which indicated Pakistan’s reluctance to fight Islamic Militant. Owing to war on terror, Pakistan has nearly lost her pelf and prestige because in the world whenever any sort of terrorists and extremists activities take place, without investigating, the whole world use to look over to the country of Pakistan and is considered the link with Pakistan. Unfortunately, Pakistan has nearly lost her name and fame owing to the said conundrum. However, it is the time for our current government to speculate over this obscure issue and device an effective strategy to tackle this problem and prevent it as soon as possible.

Indeed a laudable effort...your plan to do it on regular basis will help you a lot,inshAllah.some points which i want to mention

1.Try to use simple words & keep heavy vocabulary for decoration purpose i.e occasionally. Too florid sentence gives a a negative impact.

2. Learn the appropriate use of heavy vocab..

Since a decade, owing to abysmal terrorism, our country has been suffered a lot terribly. or Since a decade,owing to increasing terrorism related incidents,our country has suffered a lot. (how about these 2 sentences??compare & feel the difference)

Besides, according the estimated, 2% growth rate of Pakistan, what for country of fiscal population of 180 million turns out to be roughly around 3.2 million every year

Think again,the sense it is conveying??

3. Accurate use of tenses means an impression that is bound to benefit you.

Keep writing & improving

Regards

Fassi · #9 Saturday, July 28, 2012

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Originally Posted by pearlyS

Indeed a laudable effort...your plan to do it on regular basis will help you a lot,inshAllah.some points which i want to mention

1.Try to use simple words & keep heavy vocabulary for decoration purpose i.e occasionally. Too florid sentence gives a a negative impact.

2. Learn the appropriate use of heavy vocab..

Since a decade, owing to abysmal terrorism, our country has been suffered a lot terribly. or Since a decade,owing to increasing terrorism related incidents,our country has suffered a lot. (how about these 2 sentences??compare & feel the difference)

Besides, according the estimated, 2% growth rate of Pakistan, what for country of fiscal population of 180 million turns out to be roughly around 3.2 million every year

Think again,the sense it is conveying??

3. Accurate use of tenses means an impression that is bound to benefit you.

Keep writing & improving

Regards

An appreciable effort and I strongly agreed with PEARLYS bro, in addition to his said instructions before concluding the article also suggest some ways for resolving the problem don't put it on the readers.

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Originally Posted by ssara

Date: Juldy 27,2012
The apex of abysmal terrorism is still upholding overwhelmingly
Since a decade owing to the apex of abysmal terrorism, our country has been suffered a lot terribly. Day by day the terrorism is going to its obscure apex and has killed 35,00 people.

and correct the above mentioned figures too please. How can you say 5000 Officials have been killed out of 3500....

It must be 35000 if I'm not mistaken.

pearlyS · #10 Saturday, July 28, 2012

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Originally Posted by Fassi

An appreciable effort and I strongly agreed with PEARLYS bro, in addition to his said instructions before concluding the article also suggest some ways for resolving the problem don't put it on the readers.

and correct the above mentioned figures too please. How can you say 5000 Officials have been killed out of 3500....

It must be 35000 if I'm not mistaken.

agreed....don't take our points negatively,you can write impeccably through continuous effort & practice. moreover,i am sister ,not brother

careful use of figures gives you marks...but i think it was typo not ignorance of facts.