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[mahdia]

Debate, national interests vs democratic values in the context of recent political and constitutional developments in Pakistan.

[bmahmood]

Politicians should not only burgeon thier politics, they should address cunundrum issuess on priority basis by taking some audacious steps. If thier policies will bring immense change in resolving issues for national intrest then you may consider a paved way towards amelioration. Personal intrests should not intervene in national intrests and progression. Abysmal acts in the form of paralysed rituals must be abjured by all of us. Empowerment of democracy in any country or state is a sign of emollient policies and procedures governed by the government. Cataclysm and philosophy of anachronism must be abjured for national intrest. Avarice may attenuate democracy values which may rise castigation among the groups of democratic allies. Anomalous behaviour may lead to arduous situation while halcyon will lead towards efficacy in national intrest during standardisation of democracy rituals. A complete buttress of all groups is required to built up a healthy strcture of democracy in any state, where national intrest should be free from gainsay otherwise we should be ready for convoluted and cunundrum crisis.

[Abid Kakar]

@bmahmood
you have used outstanding vocabulary in your paragraph on the concerned topic, no doubt. But its not all for effective composition, I think... coherence, continuity, and smooth flow of thoughts are the essentials missed out here. Your paragraph is just a collection of topic sentense, everyone of which needs to be explicated in a separate para... I hope I have made it clear.

[Chintoo2010]

Originally Posted by bmahmood

Politicians should not only burgeon thier politics, they should address cunundrum issuess on priority basis by taking some audacious steps. If thier policies will bring immense change in resolving issues for national intrest then you may consider a paved way towards amelioration. Personal intrests should not intervene in national intrests and progression. Abysmal acts in the form of paralysed rituals must be abjured by all of us. Empowerment of democracy in any country or state is a sign of emollient policies and procedures governed by the government. Cataclysm and philosophy of anachronism must be abjured for national intrest. Avarice may attenuate democracy values which may rise castigation among the groups of democratic allies. Anomalous behaviour may lead to arduous situation while halcyon will lead towards efficacy in national intrest during standardisation of democracy rituals. A complete buttress of all groups is required to built up a healthy strcture of democracy in any state, where national intrest should be free from gainsay otherwise we should be ready for convoluted and cunundrum crisis.

Looks as if someone is trying to stuff heavy vocabulary words as much as possible at the cost of making the point clear. The para seems as a High Vocab Zone, paper checkers are surely more educated than us and they often punish hard for such stunts.....

[aniya warraich]

Originally Posted by bmahmood

Politicians should not only burgeon thier politics, they should address cunundrum issuess on priority basis by taking some audacious steps. If thier policies will bring immense change in resolving issues for national intrest then you may consider a paved way towards amelioration. Personal intrests should not intervene in national intrests and progression. Abysmal acts in the form of paralysed rituals must be abjured by all of us. Empowerment of democracy in any country or state is a sign of emollient policies and procedures governed by the government. Cataclysm and philosophy of anachronism must be abjured for national intrest. Avarice may attenuate democracy values which may rise castigation among the groups of democratic allies. Anomalous behaviour may lead to arduous situation while halcyon will lead towards efficacy in national intrest during standardisation of democracy rituals. A complete buttress of all groups is required to built up a healthy strcture of democracy in any state, where national intrest should be free from gainsay otherwise we should be ready for convoluted and cunundrum crisis.

Well I apologize for being a bit harsh. However you made a travesty of a simple topic :-P Long sentences without proper punctuation. Heavy vocab without complete knowledge of prepositions to be used with them. An unnecessary usage of synonyms in the same sentence. Many of the words dont even fit in the sense that was tried to create. In short, this piece of 'literature' displays the pride in Gre or sat vocab, but is a formula for failure. For css keep it simple stupid. We tend to embellish a simple thing. That's where the rub lies. Couldnt agree more with Chintoo2010.