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Theodosius Sunday, September 16, 2018 12:03 PM

Please evaluate my outline.
 
Essay topic
Being minority is a fate no one wants, can nationalism be really inclusive?
[B]Outline[/B]

A- Introduction
a-Differences always exist
b-What is nationalism?
c-Yes, nationalism can be inclusive
B-Why being minority is not desirable?
a-Undue suppression of minorities
b-Violation of rights
C- Why state needs inclusiveness in nationalism?
a-Essential for national security
b-Important for effective implement I on of policies
c-For bringing synergy in state
D- How nationalism can really be inclusive?
a- Educating the masses
b- Equal rights for all
c- Supremacy of merit
E-Inclusiveness of nationalism; Pakistan's case
a-Ethnic issues in Karachi, Balochistan and other areas
b-Violation of human rights
c-Foreign involvement
F-Suggestion for bringing needed inclusiveness in Pakistan.
a-Bringing changes in syllabus
b-Awareness campaigns by social media
c-zero tolerance towards religious extremism
d-Dismantling foreign involvement
G-Conclusion.

Theodosius Monday, September 17, 2018 02:18 PM

any help

SamiShaikh Monday, September 17, 2018 02:56 PM

Your outline seems very contradictory to me. From what I could understand, you believe nationalism can be inclusive, and you have rightly provided few suggestions for that. But before that, you need to present a few examples to strengthen your stance.

It is just my analysis.

Theodosius Monday, September 17, 2018 05:38 PM

[QUOTE=SamiShaikh;1074708]Your outline seems very contradictory to me. From what I could understand, you believe nationalism can be inclusive, and you have rightly provided few suggestions for that. But before that, you need to present a few examples to strengthen your stance.

It is just my analysis.[/QUOTE]

First of all, thanks a lot for your time!
Yes you are right I did not mentioned any examples of how nationalism can be inclusive.

If we add example of USA having inclusiveness in nationalism, would it be a correct argument?

Please tell what examples I should have given in order to improve.

Regards

SamiShaikh Monday, September 17, 2018 11:00 PM

I had actually written why nationalism cannot be inclusive when I practiced the topic, so my brain is pretty flooded with that idea. But I think the US and Canada are a good start. You can also include the charter of Madinah of the Prophet's time and Hazrat Umar's rule.
European Union's immigration policies in the past decade can be a good start too.
I hope you get the idea.

zahida noor Friday, September 28, 2018 08:39 PM

Introduction
a) Origin of nationalism; a reaction to clutches of feudalism
b) Main Objective underlying a nation's formulation.
c) Suffering minorities at the hands of majority groups in nation-states.

Nationalism is not an inclusive concept :
a) Representation of majority values.
b) Inevitable conflict of beliefs and aspirations between majority and minority groups.
c) Conformity and compromise demanded of minorities in certain realms of life in a nation-state
d) Repression and Violation of rights of minorties
i) Ethnic genocide of Rohingya Muslims by Budhist majority
ii) Atrocities and demographic manipulation in kashmir by Hindu majority
iii) Repression and re-engineering program for Uighur Muslims in China
iv) Events of violence against christians and Hindus in Pakistan
e) Fear of nation-states' governments for upsetting majority sentiment

How nationalism is an inclusive phenomena?
a) Promise of protection of minority rights
b) Relatively peaceful world after establishment of nation-states. (I know this is lame :P)
c. Minority groups embraced by certain nation states.
(Honestly I have no arguments under this heading ) :P

So kindly evaluate..


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