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Tolstoy was born in a forty two room palace, surrounded by wealth, yet in the last part of his life, he gave away all of his wealth and died without a dollar in a small Russian station surrounded by peasants.

In his youth, Tolstoy led a life of luxury, yet in his later life,he dressedin the rough clothes of a peasant, made his own bed, swept his own room, and ate a very simple food.

Tolstoy is more famous today than all the kings of Russia. He wrote two great novels, namely War and Peace and Anna and Karenina. He preached peace and love and the abolition of poverty. He loved and served the poor(116 words)

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Birth of Tolstoy took place in a palace ,encircled by wealth but he distributed all and died in Russia station. He lived a lavish adolescence but wore rough clothes later.Now he is well known monarch in Russia. He wrote two novel and teached peace and love. 47 words


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Tolstoy was born in a royal residency, encircled by wealth, but he distributed all and died in a station. He lived a lavish adolescence but later lived as a peasant. Today he is a well known monarch in Russia. He teached Peace and love. (45 words)

Final Precis Life of Tolstoy

Tolstoy was born in a royal residency , encircled by wealth, but he distributed all and lived a simple life as a peasant.Now he is well known Monarch in Russia He wrote two novel and teached love and peace.(39)
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Tolstoy was born in a forty two room palace, surrounded by wealth, yet in the last part of his life, he gave away all of his wealth and died without a dollar in a small Russian station surrounded by peasants.

In his youth, Tolstoy led a life of luxury, yet in his later life,he dressedin the rough clothes of a peasant, made his own bed, swept his own room, and ate a very simple food.

Tolstoy is more famous today than all the kings of Russia. He wrote two great novels, namely War and Peace and Anna and Karenina. He preached peace and love and the abolition of poverty. He loved and served the poor(116 words)

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Birth of Tolstoy took place in a palace ,encircled by wealth but he distributed all and died in Russia station. He lived a lavish adolescence but wore rough clothes later.Now he is well known monarch in Russia. He wrote two novel and teached peace and love. 47 words


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Tolstoy was born in a royal residency, encircled by wealth, but he distributed all and died in a station. He lived a lavish adolescence but later lived as a peasant. Today he is a well known monarch in Russia. He teached Peace and love. (45 words)

Final Precis Life of Tolstoy

Tolstoy was born in a royal residency , encircled by wealth, but he distributed all and lived a simple life as a peasant.Now he is well known Monarch in Russia He wrote two novel and teached love and peace.(39)
You have gotten the length correct but some of your statements are misleading. Tolsty was not a monarch. He was a writer. The point you are referring to in the actual text is "Tolstoy is more famous today than all the kings of Russia." So condensing this to "IS a monarch" is misleading and incorrect. Also "teached" is not a word, it should be "taught".

Remember never to make any sort of grammatical or structural error in a paragraph so short since it stands out more starkly. Also in Precis including an idea that was not part of the original text is also a big no no. Keep the language of the precis simple and crisp since the main purpose of it is to help people get through large blocks of text easily and in as little time as possible.
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