Precis from 2018

[qasimahmadilyas]

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Subject: Climate Impacts Human Nature

"The cold climate is beneficial to the mankind as it throws obstacles that need to be conquered. In doing so, human agency is extraordinarily trained as the man needs to take control over various factors of productions such as land, his labor and supply chain of essential commodities. This proves a beacon of hope. In contrast, life in the humid climates faces no such hurdles, which make life lazy and dull. Even spending a day out in the tropics requires only a tree, its fruits and shadows, without any gainful efforts. However, when the winter arrives, it is often challenging to the tropic inhabitants as they are required to put extra efforts. Consequently, the climate difference between the tropics and temperate regions impacts human nature as well."


Original from 2018 P&C Paper

"It is in the temperate countries of northern Europe that the beneficial effects of cold are most manifest. A cold climate
seems to stimulate energy by acting as an obstacle. In the face of an insuperable obstacle our energies are numbed by
despair; the total absence of obstacles, on the other hand leaves no room for the exercise and training of energy; but a
struggle against difficulties that we have a fair hope of over-coming, calls into active operation all our powers. In like
manner, while intense cold numbs human energies, and a hot climate affords little motive for exertion, moderate cold
seems to have a bracing effect on the human race. In a moderately cold climate man is engaged in an arduous, but no
hopeless struggles and with the inclemency of the weather. He has to build strong houses and procure thick clothes to
keep himself warm. To supply fuel for his fires, he must hew down trees and dig coal out of the earth. In the open air,
unless he moves quickly, he will suffer pain from the biting wind. Finally, in order to replenish the expenditure of
bodily tissue caused by his necessary exertions, he has to procure for himself plenty of nourishing food.
Quite different is the lot of man in the tropics. In the neighbourhood of the equator there is little need of clothes or fire,
and it is possible with perfect comfort and no danger to health, to pass the livelong day stretched out on the bare ground
beneath the shade of a tree. A very little fruit or vegetable food is required to sustain life under such circumstances, and
that little can be obtained without much exertion from the bounteous earth.
We may recognize must the same difference between ourselves at different seasons of the year, as there is between
human nature in the tropics and in temperate climes. In hot weather we are generally languid and inclined to take life
easily; but when the cold season comes, we find that we are more inclined to vigorous exertion of our minds and
bodies."

[MuneezaRafiq]

Originally Posted by qasimahmadilyas

I'll be highly indebted to the ones who may help me evaluate this precis.

Subject: Climate Impacts Human Nature

"The cold climate is beneficial to the mankind as it throws obstacles that need to be conquered. In doing so, human agency is extraordinarily trained as the man needs to take control over various factors of productions such as land, his labor and supply chain of essential commodities. This proves a beacon of hope. In contrast, life in the humid climates faces no such hurdles, which make life lazy and dull. Even spending a day out in the tropics requires only a tree, its fruits and shadows, without any gainful efforts. However, when the winter arrives, it is often challenging to the tropic inhabitants as they are required to put extra efforts. Consequently, the climate difference between the tropics and temperate regions impacts human nature as well."

Here's what I've gathered after reading the original precis para:

Effects of extremely cold climate (it numbs a person) vs. cold climate (leads us to exert ourselves) (sentence 1-3)
Effects of moderately cold climate (sentence 4-9)
Human beings in tropics/closer to equator (10-12)
Conclusion of the para: Hot seasons make us languid and cold seasons make our minds and bodies vigorous.

In my opinion, you should begin by contrasting human behavior in extreme cold climate with a moderately cold one, just like it is in the original para.

The rest of your precis is well-written. There are no grammatical issues whatsoever. I only suggest that you rewrite this part : "requires only a tree, its fruits and shadows, without any gainful efforts" and instead write "requires the fruit and shade of a tree". The latter makes the sentence flow smoother without the breaks from commas.

In your last sentence, you should replace 'consequently' with something like 'in conclusion/thus'. The word consequently is used in a specific formula as follows: "Phenomenon A occurred" consequently, "B happened." The way you've used the word isn't right in my opinion.

[qasimahmadilyas]

Thank you for suggestions.

In my understanding of the word 'consequently', as is in this case, stems from the contrasting effects of the tropical and temperate climates on the human nature. Therefore, employing the transitional word 'consequently' suited the most. Although, other transitional words such as 'thus', 'therefore', 'resultantly', etc., are also good substitutes.