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[CENTER][/CENTER][B][B]War inimical to human civilization[/B][/B]
War has always been found out as the main cause of destruction of civilized societies throughout the course of history. In early age war seemed more reasonable to states as its benefits outweighed its devastations thus, states indulged in war without fearing its consequences. War has a subtle yet harmful way of making people war addicts eventually. War not only feeds upon the state’s economy and government regime through, exhausting large share of state resources and human resources, but also destructs people’s living standards. In modern times war has become even more harmful due to advent of nuclear age and modern weaponry. Consequently, it is crucial for safety human life to remove this ever-spreading disease. However, history after facing wars has highlighted that this damage to civilization and human race can be avoided through two different ways; individuals can either refuse personal engagement in war i.e. a selfless sentiment or individual and government’s collective effort to abandon warfare for peace. Experience advocates that second solution proves to be more efficient.

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I completely agree with you, but the problem is that I do not have a friend or a partner for css preparation.

Then I would recommend that you look for any good teacher in your area. Someone who has good reputation in such things. Besides, I am sharing my attempt of the same precis, so to give something to you to compare your precis with.

[B]Title: Extent of War in a Civilization[/B]

War is the most likely cause of downfall of a civilization and writer aims at studying its nature and extent. The institution of war turns into a lethal phenomenon when it becomes evident that that the society cannot escape from its hold. Historically, war was a desirable act for a nation because its payoffs exceeded its costs. And the nations were not accountable for their actions in a war. War becomes a viable mean to further the interests when nations achieve a degree of economic stability and political organization. But when war is carried out, it drains out the nation’s economic and political resources and puts disastrous impacts on human lives. Resultantly, war becomes a tumor unless nation decides not to exercise it. Similarly, in past, when war seemed inevitable, energies were put to thwart it by using either of the two options: by refusing to go the war at individual level-refuting the state or by persuading state to resolve conflict through peaceful means. And experience entails that the latter option has been more rewarding.

Thankyou. i think your attempt is way better than mine

What are your optionals?

Political science
Business administration
USA history
Anthropology
Stuck between environmental science\ mercantile law \ philosophy

I would advise to choose between Env. Science and Mercantile law, If you have studied Mercantile law previously.

i have an introductory knowledge of mercantile law, I'm considering to opt it as every other person is opting environmental science.

Yeah true ... I am among those people too!

[QUOTE=ammara omer;1115397]Political science

Business administration

USA history

Anthropology

Stuck between environmental science\ mercantile law \ philosophy[/QUOTE]You should seriously consider Constitutional Law. It will require minimal effort as Paper 2 of Political Science covers 80-90% syllabus of Constitutional Law.

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[QUOTE=Neelam ShujahUddin;1115431]You should seriously consider Constitutional Law. It will require minimal effort as Paper 2 of Political Science covers 80-90% syllabus of Constitutional Law.

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is it a scoring subject?

orignal passage
In studding the breakdowns of civilizations, the writer has subscribed to the conclusion – no new discovery! – that war has proved to have been the proximate cause of the breakdown of every civilization which is known for certain to have broken down, in so far as it has been possible to analyze the nature of these breakdowns and to account for their occurrence. Like other evils war has no insidious way of appearing not intolerable until it has secured such a stranglehold upon the lives of its addicts that they no longer have the power to escape from its grip when its deadlines has become manifest. In the early stages of civilization’s growth, the cost of wars in suffering and destruction might seem to be exceeded by the benefits occurring from the wining of wealth and power and the cultivation of the “military virtues” ; and, in this phase of history, states have often found themselves able to indulge in war with one another with something like impunity even for the defeated party. War does not begin to reveal its malignity till the war making society has begun to increase its economic ability to exploit physical nature and its political ability to organize manpower; but, as soon as this happens, the god of war to which the growing society has long since been dedicated proves himself a Moloch by devouring an ever larger share of the increasing fruits of man’s industry and intelligence in the process of taking an ever larger toll of life and happiness; and, when the society’s growth in efficiency reaches a point at which it becomes capable of mobilizing a lethal quantum of its energies and resources for military use then war reveals itself as being a cancer which is bound to prove fatal to its victim unless he can cut it out and cast it from him, since its malignant tissues have now learnt to grow faster that the healthy tissues on which they feed.
In the past when this danger-point in the history of the relations between war and civilization has been reached and recognized, serious efforts have sometimes been made to get rid of war in time to save society, and these endeavours have been apt to take one or other of two alternative directions. Salvation cannot, of course, be sought anywhere except in the working of the consciences of individual human beings; but individuals have a choice between trying to achieve their aims through direct action as private citizens and trying to achieve then through indirect action as citizen of states. Personal refusal to lend himself in any way to any war waged by his state for any purpose and in any circumstances is a line of attack against the institution of war that is likely to appeal to an ardent and self-sacrificing nature; by comparison, the alternative peace strategy of seeking to persuade and accustom governments to combine in jointly resisting aggression when it comes and in trying to remove its stimuli before hand may seem a circuitous and unheroic line of attack on the problem. Yet experience up to date indicates unmistakably, in the present writer’s opinion, that the second of these two hard roads is by far the more promising.

[QUOTE=ammara omer;1115372][CENTER][/CENTER][B][B]War inimical to human civilization[/B][/B]
War has always been found out as the main cause of destruction of civilized societies throughout the course of history. In early age war seemed more reasonable to states as its benefits outweighed its devastations thus, states indulged in war without fearing its consequences. War has a subtle yet harmful way of making people war addicts eventually. War not only feeds upon the state’s economy and government regime through, exhausting large share of state resources and human resources, but also destructs people’s living standards. In modern times war has become even more harmful due to advent of nuclear age and modern weaponry. Consequently, it is crucial for safety human life to remove this ever-spreading disease. However, history after facing wars has highlighted that this damage to civilization and human race can be avoided through two different ways; individuals can either refuse personal engagement in war i.e. a selfless sentiment or individual and government’s collective effort to abandon warfare for peace. Experience advocates that second solution proves to be more efficient.[/QUOTE]

[B]Here you go![/B]

War has always been found out as the main cause of destruction of civilized societies throughout the course of history. In [U]early age war[/U] [B](Early age of what? Be specific as the original passage mentions "stages of civilization growth." Complete sentence/rephrase it)[/B] seemed more reasonable to states as its benefits outweighed its devastations thus, states indulged in war without fearing its consequences. [U]War has a subtle yet harmful way of making people war addicts eventually[/U]. [B](This sentence lacks connection and gives incomplete sense here).[/B] War not only feeds upon the state’s economy and government regime through[U],[/U] [B](This comma does not belong here.Reconsider its position)[/B] exhausting large share of state resources and human resources, but also [U]destructs people’s living standards[/U] [B](Are you sure about this that real passage talks about it? Ponder over it).[/B] [U]In modern times war has become even more harmful due to advent of nuclear age and modern weaponry.[/U] [B](The original paragraph does not mention "nuclear age" or anything of contemporary times. It does talk about a point where society's growth is sufficient).[/B] Consequently, it is crucial for safety human life to remove this ever-spreading disease. However, history after facing wars has highlighted that this damage to civilization and human race can be avoided through two different ways; individuals can either refuse personal engagement in war i.e. a selfless sentiment or individual and government’s collective effort to abandon warfare for peace. Experience advocates that second solution proves to be more efficient. [B](There seems an unequal attention given to the first part of the passage and lack gist from the second one).[/B]

Precis must be in Past tense. Do not add something alien to precis, keep your focus only on the original paragraph idea. And, Do not make grammatical mistakes.
Good work, keep practicing.
Hope it helps!