Originally Posted by KAWISH

aoa Kamran your effort is appriciable in two respects; you have followed advice regarding qouting examples and secondly you have accuratly graseped the idea of the topic.
there are still few lackings.
Firstly, no doubt your ideas are good and your argument is strong,but the thought as a whole is presented in a disorganised manner and it gives the impression of broken thoughts.the example is the para against which i have marked the signe.you could have better begin a new para here.
Secondly though you have done it nicely indirectly,do highlight the role of HOPE in life directly as well,
best regards
Note;since i could not focus on grammatical mistakes,the others might do.thanks

Originally Posted by kamran_shaikh

Aslam-o-Alaikum Kawish,
thank you so much for your suggestions.i really appreciate your responses. Kawish,however, you supported,before few days, the comments of Javed Iqbal for writting an expansion in one para.hence, in few of those comments of u i changed the way of writting my expansions.Please clear it again that we should write expansion either in one para or in several paras.
Regards.

Originally Posted by kamran_shaikh

There are no hopeless situations,there are only men who have grown hopeless about them:
The word impossible is only to be found in the dictionary of fools.In this world nothing is impossible.Everything can be done with constant labout(layout) and preservance(preservation).Indeed, it takes time to get things done.The word impossible itself says that Im-possible.moreover, it is a man who has achieved great heights.man laid his feet on the surface of moon.now he is thinking to develope(develop) cities and countries there.Napoleon,for instance,achieved his goals.he was a man of rules(not fit here).he said,"impossible is only a word which is unknown to me".He paved the ways of success from poverty to great power.On the other hand, those who don't have will power and are scared about achieving their goals,achieve nothing.those who say that particular action can not be performed, are hopeless.they can not perform that action in their lives.Again, those who think about performing certain tasks, accomplish easily.However, it takes time and energy.Further, If you say to an eagle that he can not fly because he weigh more than that of his wings, He probably can(will) not fly and remains(will remain) in the fear of falling down.Saime(Same) is with man.If you say a young boy that he can not read and write,he will not even bother to do so.In addition to this, hoples(hopeless) situations are created by man.one should remain optimistic. And one(don't write here) should take aim and think of achieving it tanaciously(tenaciously).if you think of gloomy side of picture you will be vournished and can not face situations bravely.On the contrary, people should think about bright side of things and remain optimistic..Suming(summing) up, man can perform any difficult task.he needs to remain firm and strong enough to face the winds of the world.Lastly,Man achieve(achieves) his goal because he is hopful(hopeful).against it, man becomes,sometimes,hopless(hopeless) and achieves nothing because he is scared of situations.Therefore,it has been said that there are no hopeless situations, there are only men who have grown hopless(hopeless) about them.

Originally Posted by kamran_shaikh

Thank you so much brother
Dear iam still confused about writing expansions in multiple paragraphs.Do we need to devide the expansion in paragraphs or not?
please comments.

Originally Posted by javed_iqbal7863

expanding the proverb in one paragraph is better than expanding in multiple paragraphs. Because, we discuss only one idea, given in the form of proverb. You can expand it in multiple paragraphs, it depends on how you express your idea.

Originally Posted by kamran_shaikh

Dreams for future rely on the work play of today:
Man works hard to achieve success in future. He maintains constant labor and perseverance in order to make his dream true. Undoubtedly, the present time of man is connected with that of his future. If he works hard today, he will touch immense heights in future. For instance, Bill Gates, one of the richest tycoons, was rusticated from his university because of his deplorable performance . So, what he did, he suffered. However, in span of time he flourished his future by constant labor. And he established Microsoft Corporation.
On the contrary, some people are exceptionally fortunate. They do nothing in their present days. But they gain everything they dream. Bayron was such. He awoke one morning and found himself famous. But it happens rarely. In usual cases, people’s work done today, blesses sweet fruit tomorrow. Indeed, while working tenaciously to achieve future dream, man faces many stumbling blocks on the way to his success. No doubt, one who faces those hurdles bravely, get his dream true. On the other hand, man who does not sustain pressure of problems, while struggling for his aim, definitely fails to beat his goal. In some cases, such people, who do not dare to fight for their dream, faces sever miseries and mental agony.
Summing up, what man dreams for future is related to his actions. If he works hard and commits to get his dream true in future, he will, without any shadow of doubt, touch the sky. However, if he does not adopt constant labor and perseverance today, he will confront hardships and will fail to achieve his objective. Thus, it becomes clear that dreams for future rely on the work play of today.