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sir mussa i done it..check dis 2..... Regards
a poor piece of writing. First of all in the opening you should explain the maxim.but you discussed only the first part in three to four lines. Even after reading the whole passage you cant get the the theme of the passage . Ok now just do one thing read the whole passage again and suggest a title for it.

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A hard working Chinese

Diligent efforts of human resource made China a economic giant. There was time when Chinese society was entangled with number of social evils, but the Communists revolutionized the very structure of the Chinese society and inculcated the gene of productiveness in their people. And by dint of laborious work of 60 years, the china is now commanding the economy of the world. For instance, the small houses of industrial province of China turned into full-fledge factories and are doing their best to improve economy of China. Moreover, The Chinese government officials are also putting their maximum efforts to ensure barrier-less business in their mother land. In the words of Thomas Alva Edison " There is no substitute for hard work" and the case of China authenticated it. Thus, Chinese destiny was alter by its industrious human resource.
Dear just buy a good book to understand how expansion should be made.its not a well written paragraph
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For instance, Bill Gates, one of the richest tycoons, was rusticated from his university because of his deplorable performance . So, what he did, he suffered. However, in span of time he flourished his future by constant labor. And he established Microsoft Corporation.
On the contrary, some people are exceptionally fortunate. They do nothing in their present days. But they gain everything they dream. Bayron was such.
irrelevantand contradicting examples to the main topic. You are showing here that you can be successful even you don't work today.
one who faces those hurdles bravely, get his dream true. On the other hand, man who does not sustain pressure of problems, while struggling for his aim, definitely fails to beat his goal. In some cases, such people, who do not dare to fight for their dream, faces sever miseries and mental agony.
again it seems that you wanted to say that one should face the hardships manly. Irrelevant to the topic.
In short poor performance.try to improve.
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For instance, Bill Gates, one of the richest tycoons, was rusticated from his university because of his deplorable performance . So, what he did, he suffered. However, in span of time he flourished his future by constant labor. And he established Microsoft Corporation.
On the contrary, some people are exceptionally fortunate. They do nothing in their present days. But they gain everything they dream. Bayron was such.
irrelevantand contradicting examples to the main topic. You are showing here that you can be successful even you don't work today(in exceptional cases..).
one who faces those hurdles bravely, get his dream true. On the other hand, man who does not sustain pressure of problems, while struggling for his aim, definitely fails to beat his goal. In some cases, such people, who do not dare to fight for their dream, faces sever miseries and mental agony.
again it seems that you wanted to say that one should face the hardships manly. Irrelevant to the topic.
In short poor performance.try to improve.
brother thank u so so much.thank u for pointing out my mistakes.Brother please it is my humble request to u to read my expansion again..my first paragraph is FOR the maxim and second AGAINST it and third concluding the stuff..in my first paragraph i have supported the maxim through example.in the second, i have again backed the maxim by discouraging the exceptional cases(bayron's example).Lastly, if u go through the exploring the world of english and read the expansions thoroughly written over there,u will definitely come to know that it is not necesssry to define the maxim...well thank you brother...Please correct me,if iam wrong
(yes i have suited the contradictory example knowingly so as to clearify other aspects of maxim.but the clearfication is closely related to the maxim , not irrelavent)
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a poor piece of writing. First of all in the opening you should explain the maxim.but you discussed only the first part in three to four lines. Even after reading the whole passage you cant get the the theme of the passage . Ok now just do one thing read the whole passage again and suggest a title for it.
A poor piece of writing in which sense? I didnt get that... u just tell me about the intro.... n what is next? my examples are irrelevant or wht is other fault?
N U SAID ME to give a title of this passage .... tell me in a extensive way....
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To err is human, to forgive is divine

This saying is from “An Essay on Criticism,” by Alexander Pope. The basic meaning of Pope’s line is that any human can make a mistake, so we should try to forgive them, just as God is said to show divine mercy and forgive sinners. The first part to err is human means that every single person is fallible and bound to make mistakes, including ourselves. Err here refers to doing something that is wrong. The second half of the phrase refers to the act of forgiveness. All people commit sins and make mistakes. God forgives them, and people are acting in a godlike (divine) way when they forgive.

The holy prophet (PBUH) showed a humane behavior and treatment towards Jews and his enemies. An old lady who threw rubbish on his head regularly, when he often passed in front of her house, fell ill. The holy prophet (PBUH) moved into the house to acquire about her health. He was full of compassion. He forgave her on this bad action. The holy prophet (PBUH) taught Muslims to how forgive others on their lapses.

The Prophet (PBUH) was the most forgiving person. He was ever ready to forgive his enemies. When he went to Ta’if to preach the message of Allah, its people mistreated him. They abused him and hit him with stones. He left the city humiliated and wounded. When he took shelter under a tree, the angel of Allah visited him and told him that Allah sent him to destroy the people of Ta’if because of their sin of mistreating their Prophet. The Prophet -peace be upon him- prayed to Allah to save the people of Taif and forgave them, because what they did was out of their ignorance.
If you are in a privileged position, you must show humane attitude to your co workers. To be in a commanding position, one needs a big heart to accommodate the vagaries of one’s subordinates. If they make minor mistakes deliberate or otherwise, overlook them. Forgive them for their lapses. Man should show compassion, sympathy and forgiveness to others.

The maxim has been proved that forgiveness is a godly attribute. Forgiveness is one of the great virtues that all people should aspire for. We should avoid lapses of others and try to forgive them. If we really want to love, we must learn how to forgive.
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AOS bro Musa i have written this expansion please check it and give your remarks.
TO ERR IS HUMAN ,TO FORGIVE IS DIVINE
Human nature is very much inclined towards making mistakes.He does so knowingly or in ignorance .forgiveness is the chahacteristic of God alone.if a human forgive another’s mistakes and errors,he rises above humanity and attain the quality of God.
Human is home to errors.but inspite of that he does not show openheartedness to forgive another human’s mistakes.As the followers of islam we have the glorious example of holy prophet of islam before us.he was so merciful that he even forgave his bitterest enemies.on the occasion of his trip to Taif for preaching islam he was so mistreated by the people there.they even hurled stones at him.but instead of cursing them,he prayed to Allah for their guidance.his forgiving nature won the hearts of his friends and foes alike.because of his merciful nature he is “rehmat-lil-aalemin”.forgiveness helps to reform society.bitter feelings against one another
Helps no one but create fraction and division.forgiveness infuses love and
sympathy(characteristics of God)in the hearts of humans for one another.this is what makes nations united and strong.
The world at present needs the harmony and unity all the more. When revenge and retaliation do not bore any good results it is better to adopt divine path of forgiveness.if one want to create peace and love in society and desire to be possessor of Godly qualities,he must learn to forgive one another’s little mistakes.
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@ drastic and Csscandidate
nice effort by both of you.
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no need to write This saying is from “An Essay on Criticism,” by Alexander Pope.
Nice examples by both of you and clear explanation of the maxim. csscandidate has written a bit better.

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brother thank u so so much.thank u for pointing out my mistakes.Brother please it is my humble request to u to read my expansion again..my first paragraph is FOR the maxim and second AGAINST it and third concluding the stuff..in my first paragraph i have supported the maxim through example.in the second, i have again backed the maxim by discouraging the exceptional cases(bayron's example).Lastly, if u go through the exploring the world of english and read the expansions thoroughly written over there,u will definitely come to know that it is not necesssry to define the maxim...well thank you brother...Please correct me,if iam wrong
(yes i have suited the contradictory example knowingly so as to clearify other aspects of maxim.but the clearfication is closely related to the maxim , not irrelavent)
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No need to do these things as it confuses the reader about what actually the writer wants to say. Just explain the line in simple way.
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If your talking about The Pope, it should be "applauded by the Pope" or if you want to write his name it should be, "applauded by Pope 'Name'". If your talking about Alexander Pope then you should write his full name and its better if you mention who he was too. applauded by Alexander Pope, the eighteenth-century English poet known for his translation of Homer.
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In a strategy it is important to see distant things close and take a distanced view of closed things

A strategy is indeed a plan chalked out to achieve the specific goal. A strategy varies in its nature and degree. It is designed by keeping in view the ground realities and after thorough observation of its pros and cons. It plays significant role in inter-state and intra-state relations and also in the development of the country. The failure or success of a strategy breeds widespread effects. Therefore, it is imperative that while planning a strategy its outcomes in short run and long run should be evaluated. Thus, in this regard it is important to see distant things close and the should also take a distanced view of close things.
The history is replete with such example where a strategy is designed by keeping in view above tactics and proved fruitful. The truce of Hudabiya was signed between Muslims and Quresh in the sixth century. The terms and conditions laid down in the treaty were unfavorable on the part of Muslims. However, Hazart Muhammad (PBUH) accepted these harsh and difficult conditions which ultimately brought grandeur victory for Muslims. In fact it was political acumen of Hazart Muhammad (PBUH) who viewed distant things in a closed view and close things in a broad view.
Sir Syed Ahmed khan was a great Muslim luminary during the British rule in Indo-Pak subcontinent. He realized the importance of education for the amelioration of the Muslims. In this context, he planned a strategy to embark on the policy of acquiring western education. In this sphere, he viewed a distant thing close i.e. amelioration of the downtrodden Muslims and in this regard, he took the distanced view of close thing i.e. attainment of western education. The strategy became successful which culminated in the achievement of separate homeland for Muslims.
It in concluded that a strategy play pivotal role in development of country and relations among countries. Therefore, there is no denying fact that while designing a strategy it is important to see distant thing close and take a distanced view of close things
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