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I don't think Zareen's sentence structure is "really weak". She writes elegantly and with good grammatical precision. You don't need a particularly pompous style of writing to get through CSS. In fact, if you focus too much on the "form", with lofty and superfluous flowering, you may be forced to compromise on the "content". During practice and preparation, improvement in the form and in the content should go side by side.
As a matter of fact, if you write gibberish sentences like "a specific lexicon which is compulsorily functional and a typical orchestration of words", you will not even get 7 marks. There is no meaning in this sentence at all.
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a specific lexicon which is compulsorily functional and a typical orchestration of words.
Yeah, i would also like to know the meaning of compulsorily functional. Then I will surely develop this lexicon thing. Sure, sir..

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Your version is correct. I checked it up. And the reason i was curiousto know was that I attempted it in the paper. Turns out I was wrong! Precise and Composition was supposed to be my best paper
Come on scorpio.. Don't lose your heart. You'll get passed, God willing.

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Ms Zareen, your write up is much attractive. Can you kindly help me out? My writting skills are not such flowery. Owing to this I am quite confused about how to write effectively. I am looking forward for your reply.
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dear it means that the habits developed in chilhood are reflected in a mature man.

well...you have given good examples.
there is an element of redundancy...the second paragraph starts with more or less similar statements as the opening statment of the first paragraph.
..this statement is again repeated in next lines in one way or the other...
word usage is nice.about length,i can not say exaclty that should you make a paragraph of 2-3 lines or combine everything in a single composite paragraph.
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Ms Zareen, your write up is much attractive. Can you kindly help me out? My writting skills are not such flowery. Owing to this I am quite confused about how to write effectively. I am looking forward for your reply.
Rahulh, mine is not that attractive. Perhaps you haven't read others' paragraphs. Secondly, writing is not something that is developed over night. Muster some courage and write your OWN paragraphs. Post them here, if you don't have anyone who could check your write-ups (like me). Every member at this forum is quite friendly. They will tell you what to improve, according to their own logic. This is the way I do. Best of luck.
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Thank you !
There is no denial of the fact that i have not read others' paragraphs. I was just going through the forum , i saw ur expansion. It seemed preety well, therefore i praised. Anyways thank u so much for ur considerable advice. I have written something at above mentioned maxim and i m going to write here. Kindly check it give me some advice.

Child is the father of man
The maxim indicates that the future of child depends upon his childhood activities. As his behaviour is in childhood, so will in his future. It may become clear to see that what he is going to be in his coming time by observing his childhood habits.
Truely, activities of childhood fortell the future of child. Whereas, his environmental background firmly consolidate his future. Thereby, it keeps paramaount importance that how he is guided in his childhood. While, teachers and parents play a vital role in making the child's future brighteq by guiding him and protecting him from the evil-works.
Future of a child revolves around his activities. As he grows up his habits gradually strengthen the roots of his behaviour. Florence Nightingale, an angel of mercy, proved to be a great nurse, as she tended her dolls and nursed sick dogs and cats. Consequently, she became a reknown nurse who rendered admirable services to sick and wounded at the Scutari hospital in the Crimean war. Similarily, Sir Issac Newton, who became a great scientist of the world, though he was not much concentrative in his studies, he was very active in his handy-works and observations. Once, when he was a child he constructed a toy wind mill, which worked in every aspect like a real wind mill. This spirit of enquiry and imagination led him towards one of the greatest scientists of the world.
Likewise, there are so many other children whose childhood activitier have become their future. Evil-doer persons have also been brought up in our society and reason behin the scene is that either they have been come into bad company since their childhood or they are compelled to be evil-doer from their childhood. If child starts to be guide in a proper way by their teachers and parents then the world will not face the terrorism and harmony of the world will never be disturbed.
In the nutshell, child's childhood is his future , so there is a hard need to guide him in a very good way in order to make the world more peaceful place.

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Correct me if i am wrong, but to me "Child is the father of man" means that adults can learn a lot from children like being curious, honest and living enthusiastically. Since the quote is from Wordsworth and a major theme in his poetry is children's close relationship with nature. Also The two key words "Child" and "Father" must be considered together i.e. in the same time frame and not the child growing up to be a father. In poetry the word "father" has connotations of Protector and Teacher among others, whereas the word "child" usually implies innocence. Reversing the usual relationship means also reversing the implication of the words, hence meaning the child can teach the father a lot.

How do you guys justify your interpretation of the quote? surely it can be interpreted in a number of ways, but I'd like to know the reasoning behind your interpretation.
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the following links will clearify the idea of this proverb.
the first one is a whole research paper published in a journal and second one is meaning from dictionary.
http://www.psy.miami.edu/faculty/dme...her2theman.pdf
child is father of the man - Idioms - by the Free Dictionary, Thesaurus and Encyclopedia.
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if you have Saadat ali shah, read his essay on the same topic. It means that interpretation of that maxim is subject to variations. Wese b, we expand the ideas in accordance with our own whims and fantasies.

P.S. Change the topic please. Isn't anyone who could write some new expansions.
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the following links will clearify the idea of this proverb.
the first one is a whole research paper published in a journal and second one is meaning from dictionary.
http://www.psy.miami.edu/faculty/dme...her2theman.pdf
child is father of the man - Idioms - by the Free Dictionary, Thesaurus and Encyclopedia.
dear css english paper is there to check your english language skills your own first hand thoughts n ideas and not these ready made thoughts
even if there is a phd thesis on this subject u can go far or against on dat v particular topic

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if you have Saadat ali shah, read his essay on the same topic. It means that interpretation of that maxim is subject to variations. Wese b, we expand the ideas in accordance with our own whims and fantasies.

P.S. Change the topic please. Isn't anyone who could write some new expansions.
dear ive seen many of your expansions etc trust me u hv a gud command over english n u can easily make it through

better not waste ur time bcoz those who r really in a position to comment or give tips r rarely found here frankly bcoz they dont hv enough time n doz who have time like me will simply confuse u abt wots right n wots wrong :-)..
so choice is yourz

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