plz check: Adopting unchecked western lifestyle

[zak786]

Western life style is modern,open and articulate in every sphere of life because of innovations and modernization in communication and transportation western life style is radically different from islamic lifestyle.
due to the glitz and glamour of western socities, islamic nations have tried to adopt western lifestyle,which has escalated unrest in islamic nations.
things which are obscure for us are considered absolutely normal for western societies for instance wearing revealing cloths,drinking alcohol occasionally, freedom of expression infront of elders, being involved in adultery from the teen age, old people home culture and such innumerable instances which are considered condemable in our lifestyle.
unfortunately these grim habbits are adopted by our society frivolously, which is worsening the culture and lifestyle of our new generations.
if we talk about pakistan, in all the urban centres people seems to be influenced by the western lifestyle.
we adopted capitalist culture of west and doomed so many families in pakistan,they bought expensive products on credit and couldn't pay back the loans with escalating interest rate. we have innumerable examples where people have commited suicides when they were forced to pay back the money because paying loans back with ever increasing interest rates was not in their capacity.





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[virgoan]

on the whole ur article is good but u should also mention difference bw western n eastern culture. In addition to tht we should also consider balance life style. I hope u have got my point of view.

[Fading Glimpse]

good effort but what i felt is that there is lack of connection between the sentences. the transition form one sentence to the other is discrete perhaps. otherwise nicely attempted, i don't feel myself competent to give marks so wont rate it.

[Emaan zia]

Salam,i think i can"t write upto that standard that u hav approached while attempting the topic.but in my opinion, u have focussed
1.only wetern culture was discussed nd not the eastern culture
2.only urban life of pak while ignoring its impact on village life
3.only financial impact but not cultural values ,effected by this trend
4.finally,there should be conclusion,why should we not follow this trend haphazardly.
But it was anice attempt overall.
Regards