beggars are not Choosers - Page 2

shoaib khan12 · #11 Saturday, April 14, 2012

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Originally Posted by sidogar

@ shoaib khan12
Dear we have no objection but just for your guidance. I have a precedent. A friend who use to write in the columns of the daily news got failed in essay. I conclude / extract from that, the expression of your mental is very important in essay writing. Corrections / amendments are warmly welcomed

ok thanks bro, i could understand , however still need ur guidance, but sometimes i get much irritate and and wana correct my country at once but couldnt do except writing something to reduce my anger .
however thanks again for your cool comments

Quote:

Originally Posted by mashal khan

Salala is mohmand agency not in kurram..

thanks for correction, i ve confirmed it is in mohmand agency

Quote:

Originally Posted by Cosmic_libertine

Dear brother i have certain reservations regarding the paragraph u have written. i'm afraid you have committed a number of mistakes. To mention a few i must write to tell you that:

1. The tone of the passage is not formal and needs a second thought
2. Some words used are highly objectionable in formal writing such as 'puppies', 'what the hell' etc. These are not formal written words to be used in such writing.
3. You have rather deviated from the main topic which is 'beggars shoud not be choosers'. Pakistani system and politicians may be made but a part of this passage as an example. The whole paragraph must not be written about Pakistani system. you must discuss the general phenomena of the title and then come to Pakistan.

Hope my comments would be taken positively..
Regards,
Cosmic libertine

thanks man , i got it

sidogar · #12 Monday, April 16, 2012

@ shoaib khan12
Dear to change the country is a hard target to achieve. For this you have to change the mind and will of the masses of our country. The government, establishment, and the institution works according to the will of the people. You cannot change even a single person upto when you will not change his mind. So if you want to do the same, just change there minds. You know what is the lackluster of our people, as i extracted it is the result of ambiance. This is just a discussion not a personal phenomena. we have the most selfish and greedy masses in our country. Every one run before his own wants and do not consider others. This is totally my personal perception.

virk saab · #13 Wednesday, April 25, 2012

Dear Khan Sahib!
You have made an effort to attempt the paragraph which is good..
what you have put in it shows only the frustration of all of us..
But what i am afraid of is that you have gone far away from
what it is asked of you to elaborate..it does not seem like a para
on 'Beggars can not be the choosers',rather it sounds like a passage
on 'ills of our society'..and the language used is quite objectionable..
i hope you take it positively!

shoaib khan12 · #14 Wednesday, April 25, 2012

Quote:

Originally Posted by virk saab

Dear Khan Sahib!
You have made an effort to attempt the paragraph which is good..
what you have put in it shows only the frustration of all of us..
But what i am afraid of is that you have gone far away from
what it is asked of you to elaborate..it does not seem like a para
on 'Beggars can not be the choosers',rather it sounds like a passage
on 'ills of our society'..and the language used is quite objectionable..
i hope you take it positively!

man i always take things positively ' kindly read all the posts regarding this then you will come to know that what i ve written in what topic i cleared all the things . after reading all the posts if u ve anyother problem regarding writing i will appreciate that

Seii · #15 Sunday, July 07, 2013

Jean Racine : " Life is a comedy to those who think , a tragedy to those who feel."

Syeda Bukhari · #16 Tuesday, July 09, 2013

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Originally Posted by shoaib khan12

ok thanks bro, i could understand , however still need ur guidance, but sometimes i get much irritate and and wana correct my country at once but couldnt do except writing something to reduce my anger .
however thanks again for your cool comments

thanks for correction, i ve confirmed it is in mohmand agency

Quote:

Originally Posted by shoaib khan12

man i always take things positively ' kindly read all the posts regarding this then you will come to know that what i ve written in what topic i cleared all the things . after reading all the posts if u ve anyother problem regarding writing i will appreciate that

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lovely things · #17 Friday, July 12, 2013

it doesn't carry any correction here. corret it is

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