zuhaib bahi can u please evaluate my expansion?

[B][SIZE="4"]Hope springs eternal in the human breast[/SIZE][/B]

Life sustains on hope, quoted by a renowned writer. Meanwhile, sorrows and happiness are the two alternating aspects of life. In this context, a man might fall in the darkness of disgrace and disappointment, who faces consistent sorrows. Here hope plays a crucial role in human’s life. It encourages the man to come up from the dismal situation and reinvigorate a new spirit to eradicate the roots of sorrow. Doubtless, hope is deemed as a silver lining in the dark cloud. It indicates that severity and misery can be transformed into luxury and comfortable by means of hope.

Hope is the constant companion of man. Had the scientists not followed the doctrine of hope, we would have never been able to see the beauty of brightness of a bulb, amazing views of flying machines in the sky and parading ships on the ocean tides. All the scientific advancement that has been achieved so far is the outcome of optimistic approach. However, Edison had failed more than hundred times in performing experiments to invent bulb, but he never lost hope and burnt his mid night oil to achieve the objective. Ultimately, success kissed his feet. However, it would not be wrong to say that hope is responsible of all the success and progress that man has achieved so far.

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We live in deeds, not years.

When an old man of ninety died in a certain locality no one cared; however, world mourned when young John Keats died. Men are remembered by their deeds, but not by the years they spent in the world. Great men emerged out of obscurity and princes vanished in history, it is their feats which count in the end. Every day, countless men die only few make news. This news is not about how long they lived in the world, but what they did for the word. There is a common maxim that lion’s single day life is better than a hundred years of fox’s; the saying implies that lion who rules bravely even for a single day is more dignified than a fox who lives for years prowling in fear and darkness. Every person in the world wants to become great, in the one or the other day, but only few reach the pinnacle of greatness. These few great men are always remembered in history as great kings, philosophers, scientists, writers etc. When Muhammad Bin Qasim attacked Sind, he was merely a boy of seventeen and died when he was just twenty; his age is of no importance but his actions are recorded in history, for they changed the course of Indian Civilization. All these examples from history and everyday life testify to the fact that we live in deeds not years

Hope is the buoy of life
 

[B]Hope is the buoy of life[/B]

Hope is a shining star that keeps the life illuminated with its unabated brightness. Many times in the life, topsy-turvy events and tragedies take away the cheerfulness and glamour of life and leave behind gloominess. In order to reinvigorate life and bring back the lost laughter, it is important to let the element of "hope" come into play. The notion of hope is compared to the driving force which let the ship of life sailing smoothly even during hard times. It is this very element of hope which can reenergize the inner soul and bring back the lost strength to face the challenges of life head on and keep the cycle of life running even when the road of life is bumpy

As it is quite often quoted that life is not a bed of roses, it must be realized that only a strong soul can separate out thorns from these roses and make the bed of life comfortable. It is the ingredient of hope which needs to be added in the obfuscated mix of life that tests the capability of human souls to fight life's extreme situations and then make quick fixes to get back to normal. It cannot be denied that human beings cannot overcome life-difficulties by relying only on the inner soul, let it absorb the "H" word and fight against the monsters challenging the strengths of souls. Though, hope is the buoy of life besides internal it needs a continuous push from some external forces too that can create a conductive environment for it to come into play

Hence, it can be concluded that hope is a key driving-force of life and needs uninterrupted support from inner soul and a favourable environment to strike the chord of life and let it play the music of happiness and felicity

Please seniors and CSPs..Highlight my mistakes

Salam,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
Can anyone solve the meaning of the proverbs and quotations that came in the past papers of CSS?????
That is by solving 3 papers daily we can understand the meaning of all those proverbs & quotations appeared in the past papers,by solving i mean just writing the meaning of each proverb so that we can write expansion upon those topics. As students like me from science background would find it difficult to evaluate the meanings of the proverbs.....

Hope is the buoy of life

Hope is a shining star that keeps the life illuminated with its unabated brightness. Many times in the life, topsy-turvy events and tragedies take away the cheerfulness and glamour of life and leave behind gloominess. In order to reinvigorate life and bring back the lost laughter, it is important to let the element of "hope" come into play. The notion of hope is compared to the driving force which let the ship of life sailing smoothly even during hard times. It is this very element of hope which can [B]reenergize[/B] the inner soul and bring back the lost strength to face the challenges of life head on and keep the cycle of life running even when the road of life is bumpy

As it is quite often quoted that life is not a bed of roses, it must be realized that only a strong soul can separate out thorns from these roses and make the bed of life [B]comfortable.[/B] It is the ingredient of hope which needs to be added in the obfuscated mix of life that tests the capability of human souls to fight life's extreme situations and then make quick fixes to get back to normal. It cannot be denied that human beings cannot overcome life-difficulties by relying only on the inner soul, let it absorb the "H" word and fight against the monsters challenging the strengths of souls. Though, hope is the buoy of life besides internal it needs a continuous push from some external forces too that can create a[B] conductive[/B] environment for it to come into play

Hence, it can be concluded that hope is a key driving-force of life and needs uninterrupted support from inner soul and a [B]favourable[/B] environment to strike the chord of life and let it play the music of happiness and felicity
Minor Mistakes Are Highlighted:
1. Energize at the place of Re-energize
2. Comfortably
3. too, that can create a conductive environment
4. Favorable
Overall, you have good grammar and ample amount of worthy expressions.
It is my personal opinion and opinion can be disagreed.

Regards'

zabardast bhai, you have done well job.....
really impressed from your writing skill.

Ada zabardast.......
you have done well job.
really impressed from your expansion and the writing skill you are using is very fantastic.

Little Knowledge Is Dangerous Thing
 

Knowledge is like ocean which sees no limits. No matter how much time of life is spent on achieving it whole by a man, it can’t be done. Even its large, multidimentional scope could not possibly be limited. Hence show-off of superficiality and pretense manifested by many a man to become perfect, complete and mastered, Which results in problems not only for him but also for others.
Logically enough, an unskilled, inexpert and amateur person is cause of problem because, if it is taken for example, a novice pilot is given control of a plane, then it is surety that he would not be able to navigate and land the plane safely and might crash it too. In that case that incident would cost lives of passengers traveling along with him. So is case in car driving, unlearned driver is not aware of rules of driving thus would bump car into something or other. In the same way, if a fake doctor prescribe someone medicines of his own choice, then that could prove mortal for patient, cure instead. It is now a common practice that untrained, unqualified persons are calling themselves as mechanics and are repairing vehicles by conning unknowing people. Therefore there is no surety of such vehicles that how long these will run in good condition.
It is popular saying in English ‘To err is human’ that indicates no man is perfect in his doing he is liable to make mistakes in everything. In this connection, Newton, who was inventor of many things and who knew much said humbly that he was like a child picking up pebbles on shore, while vast ocean of knowledge laid unexplored before him.
In a nutshell, it is man who is born with no knowledge, gradually he gets knowledge to make himself perfect, although a complete knowledge is not accomplished, hence the desire of getting complete knowledge never fulfills and pursuit of knowledge never comes to an end.

[QUOTE=Imran Ali Memon;756525]Knowledge is like ocean which sees no limits. No matter how much time of life is spent on achieving it whole by a man, it can’t be done. Even its large, multidimentional scope could not possibly be limited. Hence show-off of superficiality and pretense manifested by many a man to become perfect, complete and mastered, Which results in problems not only for him but also for others.
Logically enough, an unskilled, inexpert and amateur person is cause of problem because, if it is taken for example, a novice pilot is given control of a plane, then it is surety that he would not be able to navigate and land the plane safely and might crash it too. In that case that incident would cost lives of passengers traveling along with him. So is case in car driving, unlearned driver is not aware of rules of driving thus would bump car into something or other. In the same way, if a fake doctor prescribe someone medicines of his own choice, then that could prove mortal for patient, cure instead. It is now a common practice that untrained, unqualified persons are calling themselves as mechanics and are repairing vehicles by conning unknowing people. Therefore there is no surety of such vehicles that how long these will run in good condition.
It is popular saying in English ‘To err is human’ that indicates no man is perfect in his doing he is liable to make mistakes in everything. In this connection, Newton, who was inventor of many things and who knew much said humbly that he was like a child picking up pebbles on shore, while vast ocean of knowledge laid unexplored before him.
In a nutshell, it is man who is born with no knowledge, gradually he gets knowledge to make himself perfect, although a complete knowledge is not accomplished, hence the desire of getting complete knowledge never fulfills and pursuit of knowledge never comes to an end.[/QUOTE]


-[SIZE="3"][FONT="Book Antiqua"]Good efforts.
- Dear, don't make long sentences.
- The more long sentences you make the more chances of mistakes you create.
- It is a good topic, you could make it better _you couldn't justify it completely.
-Word count is more than 325. You had to write between 250-300.
- There are grammatically mistakes.
- Overall, good efforts, i appreciate, keep writing.
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Regards,[/FONT][/SIZE]