yes,sir Kashif Rehman Khan

i have got your point about word limit,need of the hour (paper time duration) & needless dragging. Thanks for showing the other side of the picture( dragging). i shall post expansion on another topic avoiding mistakes of first post. i wrote that expansion without planning & in 40-45 minutes. i will give it proper time & treatment.

Regards

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Thanks,

For your further assurance:

Prof: MuZaffar Bukhari had written an article on expansion writing in world times magazine, month; March-2010.

He has written:

The Exact words are.

Try to cut out all irrelevant matters, frills or figures of speech.

Language should be as simple as possible.

That is why I said you.

Waiting for your next attempt.

regards,

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A human heart is full of desires & quest for everything he covets is in human nature. Nonetheless,desires have strange property that the more they are fulfilled the more they get multiplied. This continuous running after one's desires reduced a man into an unhappy & unsatisfied being who only gets peace after death.
Urge to amass & amplify one's gain is not new & unusual. Competing with fellow humans is not bad in itself but this makes life a machine fueled by one's own peace. This ultimate toll of having countless desires stops when one stops breathing.
When we start entertaining an idea to accomplish something or to achieve something special this peddles us to work hard. When that goal has been achieved,immense joy follows in. The sense of achievement itself propels a man to take further stride. Then comes another goal another cherished dream & wheel of struggle again picks motion. This activity start treading a path that takes away happiness & satisfaction by replacing them with greed & ungratefulness.
As all human beings are or majority of them tends to drift into this endless cycle of desires,dreams & demands. Thus they all somewhere in their heart feel a gap a void that stays unfulfilled or in some cases gets wider.Only after death this void gets filled & peace comes in. Thus it is apt that call no man happy till he is dead because precisely that is the state where he no more feel the need to improve.


total time:30 minutes

kindly check & mark

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Hey Life,I'm my own cheer leader so u can't take advantage of homeground..got it u moron??? Huh ~sheryl Almazari~

Pearl, you attempted it well, but let me mention few things here. The most basic thing to attempt these kind of questions, one must comprehend the exact meaning of the stated proverb. So, in this case, specifically, you dint comprehend the true meaning of proverb. You mentioned many irrelevant things, which certainly changed the whole subject. You pressed much on materialism but ignored some true facts.
As not every man has same purpose of life. Different men have different goals but one thing is obvious and that is every man faces difficulties in his life and the whole topic was based on it. Not every man search for materialistic things.

The second thing is examples. Examples are necessary, quotes sometimes work but relevant and few. By giving examples, you can add value to your arguments.

Quite well! Much better than previous one. Good use of Vocab.

Use Present Indefinite Tense correctly.


I shall write on it to make you understand, well.

Regards,

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I know, She has much focused on DESIRES. So called MATERIALISM.

Once a MAN asked BUDDHA, "What is LIFE?"

he replied, "A SORROW."

Man asked, "What is Sorrow?"

Buddha Answered, "Being of Desires. KHAwishat ka hona"

So, Jub tak materliasm hai tab tak INSAN khuch nhn.

Explain, the central idea of topic into two lines. I await.

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thanks you came forward to point out mistakes.yeah, i got it that way & i think reader/examiner can understand i am talking about materialism & outcome of it's blind following.if you have gone through the thread you may take this attempt as a struggle to overcome unnecessary dragging pointed out by another respected member.
i think my understanding of topic was right because i think those who do not get attracted toward materialism,they feel throes of life even more. Like our punjabi sufi poets who felt the worldly life a hindrance in their way to reach to their SHOH(beloved that is Allah sw). And the people who could look into things with lens of spirituality feel aghast due to materialism around them & thus life ....! here emphasis was not on futility of life but on dark aspects of living unhappily. (please someone correct me if i am wrong here)


yes, it is the simplest tense & hell bent to trap me in it's wrong usage
fingers crossed that one day i will use it correctly

was that for me to explain??


At the end i thank both of you for your time & observation for my not-so-good-attempt

regards

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No, it was for ASIF.

You touched the topic well but you could define it very well.

Let me tell what meanings can come out of the quotation.

Call No Man Happy Till He is Dead.

1. Jub Insaan Merta hai, Tub e pata chlta hai K, WO HAPPY THA K NHN. A true Man would Smile when he dies Means he is happy and He who weeps, He is not.

Kabbeer said:

When I was born, I wept and all laughed. Oh! Kabber, Do something, when you die, you smile, all weep.

Ek To Insaan Ko mertay Howay Deakh ker Pata Chlta hai k happy tha k nhn, Us say pehlay USAY HAPPY MAT KAHO.

2. Wo BUDDHA WALLA. Materialism Wala Example.

3. Insaan k pass subh kuch honay k bawajood b HAPPY na kaho, Us k pass health, wealth or duniya mothy main Ho tu b, Usay Happy na kahu. Q k kya pata kal us k pass health, wealth or duniya e na ho? jab tak merta nhn tub tak wo happy nhn reh skta.

So, these three can be the explanations.

I would write on same topic.

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So whats the difference between a goal and desire?

Is it desire or your goal to be CSP?

You want all of us to agree with Bhudda? whatever, man have today is because of his desire to live in a global and civilized world. His desire to live a more comfortable life led to technological developments. His curiosity, desires and his vision made his life more worthy, comfortable and professional.

Zuhaib, you put too much stress on philosophies. sometimes, you quote romi sayings, sometime other.

Brother, try to get out of the world of fantasies and try to see the realities.

I live in real world, That is why using CSS forum.

Expansion writing is much related towards Philosophy. All the quotations are of Philosophers. So do concentrate you too . I shall say you to read Rumi.

I shall tell the very difference of goal and desire in part time.

I asked you the Central Idea.

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