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Rome was not built in a day.

There is no short cut in life. For every task to be accomplished, there is a need of uninterrupted and vigorous efforts to be made. Rome,which is symbol of development and civilization, did not pan out to be what it is today in a blink of eye. It was a long journey of change from an impoverished place to its current position of civility in the modern world.

Prophet Muhammad made strenuous efforts to enlighten the benighted hearts of Meccans for around 13 years but in turn while attempting to assassinate him, they forced him to migrate from his beloved homeland. But it happened that he entered Mecca as conqueror. It all took a long span of 22 years. Wonder lamp of Aladin exists only in fairy tales and has nothing to do with the real word.

However, it is a matter of common observation that people by-passing the hard work often obstensibly succeed in achieving their wordly gains but in fact they are patent losers. Their so called success prevails for no time and vanishes soon. Real mega-hit which marks indelible effects is the success which is attained by matchless effort and vigour.

There is no ultimate goal to reach but to execute this trek of life with truthfulness and through proper channel should be the aim of our lives. Result remains with God.**

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[B]Good friends are hard to find, harder to leave and impossible to forget[/B]

The proposition unveils the importance of friendship. Good friends implies that an understanding between two persons of mutual interest. They use to share common problems except involving in material consideration. Human is bestowed with several relations but the friendship is the one, which is made by one's personal wish. Mutual Understanding is direly needed to perpetuate the friendship. In this context good friend are hard to find.

A good friend is a great assets in one's life.A Human passes through several stages of life. One shares the secrets, sorrows and happiness with a good friend by making him confidential.If he is unable to reveal his suppressed emotions, would render him in the darkness of depression. No doubt, it is the human nature that he [B]feel [/B]relaxed by sharing sorrows and happiness.

A part from that, only a sincere friend points out one's shortcomings and try to rectify it. Meanwhile a good friend will tell you when your face is dirty.
Moreover if a man dies before fulfilling some desires, then a good friend struggle hard to achieve the unfulfilled desires.

On the contrary present time is the time of selfishness and materialism. In modern society a sincere friendship seems no where. A friend of today might become an enemy of tomorrow and vice versa. All it means that the definition of a good friend is degraded. [B](Here you have done nicely[/B]

Consequently a renowned writer has wisely quoted "A friend is need is a friend in deed." In this context the proposition philosophically reflects the importance of a good friend.[/QUOTE]

What about a good friend is harder to leave and impossible to forget?? You have neglected this point, in upcoming attempt try to cover the topic in totality. Do not skip any point what is required...Apart from that you are doing good. Just keep going on...

Today try this one

[B]Give a man a fish and you feed him for a day; teach a man to fish and you feed him for a lifetime. [/B]:)

[QUOTE=KHANSHAHRUKH;679366]Rome was not built in a day.

There is no short cut in life. For every task to be accomplished, there is a need of uninterrupted and vigorous efforts to be made. Rome,which is symbol of development and civilization, did not pan out to be what it is today in a blink of eye. It was a long journey of change from an impoverished place to its current position of civility in the modern world.

Prophet Muhammad made strenuous efforts to enlighten the benighted hearts of Meccans for around 13 years but in turn while attempting to assassinate him, they forced him to migrate from his beloved homeland. But it happened that he entered Mecca as conqueror. It all took a long span of 22 years. Wonder lamp of Aladin exists only in fairy tales and has nothing to do with the real word.

However, it is a matter of common observation that people by-passing the hard work often obstensibly succeed in achieving their wordly gains but in fact they are patent losers. Their so called success prevails for no time and vanishes soon. Real mega-hit which marks indelible effects is the success which is attained by matchless effort and vigour.

There is no ultimate goal to reach but to execute this trek of life with truthfulness and through proper channel should be the aim of our lives. Result remains with God.**[/QUOTE]


Great dear, you have attempted your expansion quite outstandingly..I have not deducted any mistake except minor one. Indeed I would say it is a balanced attempt. Still there is a need of practice in your flow of thought. One thing more that be very crystal clear in your ideas and use attractive expressions. Give some instances which can make us interesting to read it completely...

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Thanks brother...... I got your point and try my best to hit the target in next proposition...
I will post it in few hours....... A part from that i really appreciate your candor contribution on the forum...........

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[B]Give a man a fish and you feed him for a day; teach a man to fish and you feed him for a lifetime.[/B]

The dictum wisely explains the features of skill. A skilful person would never suffer from hunger. He earns his livelihood by utilizing his skill. Meanwhile an unskilled helplessly depend on others good will. The adage emphatically emphasises that one must have to learn the skill to catch the fish to extinguish the fire of hunger.

The first world countries, with huge economic incentives have been following the philosophy of dictum since the antiquity. In this context China may best the best apotheosis. The axiom’s philosophy brought revolution in all spheres of life. About sixty years ago china was suffering from severe social and economical problems. Moreover, hunger, endemic diseases had rendered disaster in all walks of life. In the meantime the Chinese govt took immediate measures to come up such severe evils. In this phase of depression, govt did not provide a bread to nation rather she made a strategy to train the nation, how to earn livelihood. Consequently, in modern world china is deemed as the largest work force country. Doubtless, china’s success in covert behind the axiom’s philosophy.

While, on the contrary third world countries with less economic resources failed to make a effective strategy of providing food perpetually. In this context, Pakistan has also adopted the same strategy, granting loans and others schemes seem likely to feed once and ultimately render disaster and depression forever. Nonetheless recently announced prime minister’s scheme of granting loans to youth is likely to feed them once. It would not only cripple the economy but also render depression in the youth ultimately. In the mean time govt should have to make an effective plan which can make capable enough to earn his livelihood.

Consequently, it is better to make a nation technically strong, by teaching the techniques of earning livelihood rather than that of providing meal once. No doubt, dictum beautifully reveals the covert features of skill and acquirement.

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[B]Give a man a fish and you feed him for a day; teach a man to fish and you feed him for a lifetime.[/B]

The dictum wisely explains the features of skill. A skilful person would never suffer from hunger. He earns his livelihood by utilizing his skill. Meanwhile an unskilled helplessly [B]depend [/B]on others good will. The adage emphatically emphasises that one must have to learn the skill to catch the fish to extinguish the fire of hunger.

The first world countries, with huge economic incentives have been following the philosophy of dictum since the antiquity. In this [B]context China may best the best apotheosis[/B]. The axiom’s philosophy brought revolution in all spheres of life. About sixty years ago china was suffering from severe social and economical problems[B]suffering from socioeconomic and political problems[/B]. Moreover, hunger, endemic diseases had rendered disaster in all walks of life. In the meantime the Chinese [B]govt [/B]took immediate measures to come up such severe evils. In this phase of depression, govt did not provide a bread to nation rather she made a strategy to train the nation, how to earn livelihood. Consequently, in modern world china is deemed as the largest work force country. Doubtless, china’s success in covert behind the axiom’s philosophy.

While, on the contrary third world countries with less economic resources failed to make a effective strategy of providing food perpetually. In this context, Pakistan has also adopted the same strategy, granting loans and [B]others schemes[/B] seem likely to feed once and ultimately render disaster and depression forever. Nonetheless[B](,)[/B] recently announced prime minister’s scheme of granting loans to youth is likely to feed them once. It would not only cripple the economy but also [B]render [/B]depression in the youth ultimately. In the mean time govt should have to make an effective plan which can make capable enough to earn his livelihood.

Consequently, it is better to make a nation technically strong, by teaching the techniques of earning livelihood rather than that of providing meal once. No doubt, dictum beautifully reveals the covert features of skill and acquirement.[/QUOTE]

I have pointed out some of your mistakes. Do not repeat them again. Except minor mistakes, you have done your job pretty good. In composition, paper checker even deducts our mistakes such as full stop, capital letters and comma which are considered very minor mistakes at per our part. Therefore, do not commit these minor mistakes.

your next topic is
[B]dialogue is the best course to combat terrorism[/B]

Best of luck...:)

Please point out that minor mistake
 

[QUOTE=exclusively;679446]Great dear, you have attempted your expansion quite outstandingly..I have not deducted any mistake except minor one. Indeed I would say it is a balanced attempt. Still there is a need of practice in your flow of thought. One thing more that be very crystal clear in your ideas and use attractive expressions. Give some instances which can make us interesting to read it completely...[/QUOTE]

Thanks brother for bucking me up. Would you like to please cite that minor mistake in my expansion so that I remain solicitous in the future.

[QUOTE=KHANSHAHRUKH;679366]Rome was not built in a day.

There is no short cut in life. For every task to be accomplished, there is a need of uninterrupted and vigorous efforts to be made. Rome,which is[B] (a) [/B]symbol of development and civilization, did not pan out to be what it is today in a blink of eye. It was a long journey of change from an impoverished place to its current position of civility in the modern world.

Prophet Muhammad [B](PBUH)[/B] made strenuous efforts to enlighten the benighted hearts of Meccans for around 13 years but in turn while attempting to assassinate him, they forced him to migrate from his beloved homeland. But it happened that he entered Mecca as [B](a)[/B] conqueror. It all took a long span of 22 years. Wonder lamp of Aladin exists only in fairy tales and has nothing to do with the real word.

However, it is a matter of common observation that people by-passing the hard work often [B]obstensibly [/B]succeed in achieving their [B]wordly [/B]gains but in fact they are patent losers. Their so called success prevails for no time and vanishes soon. Real mega-hit which marks indelible effects is the success which is attained by matchless effort and vigour.

There is no ultimate goal to reach but to execute this trek of life with truthfulness and through proper channel should be the aim of our lives. Result remains with God.**[/QUOTE]

I have pointed out your minor mistakes...:)You committed some spelling and article mistakes. Do not repeat them again.

Be Blessed

[QUOTE=KHANSHAHRUKH;679366]Rome was not built in a day.

There is no short cut in life. For every task to be accomplished, there is a need of uninterrupted and vigorous efforts to be made. Rome,which is symbol of development and civilization, did not pan out to be what it is today in a blink of eye. It was a long journey of change from an impoverished place to its current position of civility in the modern world.

Prophet Muhammad made strenuous efforts to enlighten the benighted hearts of Meccans for around 13 years but in turn while attempting to assassinate him, they forced him to migrate from his beloved homeland. But it happened that he entered Mecca as conqueror. It all took a long span of 22 years. Wonder lamp of Aladin exists only in fairy tales and has nothing to do with the real word.

However, it is a matter of common observation that people by-passing the hard work often obstensibly succeed in achieving their wordly gains but in fact they are patent losers. Their so called success prevails for no time and vanishes soon. Real mega-hit which marks indelible effects is the success which is attained by matchless effort and vigour.

There is no ultimate goal to reach but to execute this trek of life with truthfulness and through proper channel should be the aim of our lives. Result remains with God.**[/QUOTE]

Excellent.. Some minor mistakes in the use of articles.. Overall, :vic

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If you want to carry on your practicing, I will give you a topic on daily basis? If you are intending to do so, then attempt this one [B]Yellow Journalism[/B]

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