A long walk home
 

A long walk home

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Dear all

please i am a student i need your help to shorten the below Paragraph to about 50 to 60 words, i mean making a short and meaningfull paragraph from the Story, with the topic sentence.

i will be very greatful if you help me soon
best regards

1- A Long Walk Home

(by: Jason Bocarro)

I grew up in the south of Spain in a little community called Estepona. I was 16 when one morning my father told me I could drive him into a remote village called Mijas, about 18 miles away, on the condition that I take the car in to be serviced at a nearby garage. Having just learned to drive and hardly ever having the opportunity to use the car, I readily accepted. I drove Dad into Mijas and promised to pick him up at 4 p.m., then drove to a nearby garage and dropped off the car. Because I had a few hours to spare, I decided to catch a couple of movies at a theatre near the garage. However, I became so immersed in the films that I completely lost track of time. When the last movie had finished, I looked down at my watch. It was six o’clock. I was two hours late.

I knew Dad would be angry if he found out I’d been watching movies. He’d never let me drive again. I decided to tell him that the car needed some repairs and that they had taken longer that had been expected. I drove up to the place where we had planned to meet and saw Dad waiting patiently on the corner. I apologized for being late and told him that I’d come as quickly as I could, but the car had needed some major repairs. I’ll never forget the look he gave me.

“I’m disappointed that you feel you have to lie to me, Jackson.”

“What do you mean? I’m telling the truth.”

Dad looked at me again. “When you did not show up, I called the garage to ask if there were any problems, and they told me that you had not yet picked up the car. So you see, I know there were no problems with the car.” A rush of guilt ran through me as I feebly confessed to my trip to the movie theater and the real reason for my tardiness. Dad listened intently as a sadness passed through him.

“I am angry, not with you but with myself. You see, I realize that I have failed as a father if after all these years you feel that you have to lie to me. I have failed because I have brought up a son who cannot even tell the truth to his own father, I’m going to walk home now and contemplate where I have gone wrong all these years”.

“But Dad, its 18 miles to home. It’s dark. You can’t walk home.”

My protests, my apologies and the rest of my utterances were useless. I had let my father down, and I was about to learn one of the most painful lessons of my life. Dad began walking along the dusty roads. I quickly jumped in the car and followed behind, hoping he would relent. I pleaded all the way, telling him how sorry I was, but he simply ignored me, continuing on silently, thoughtfully and painfully. For 18 miles I drove behind him, averaging about five miles per hour.

Seeing my father in so much physical and emotional pain was the most distressing and painful experience that I have ever faced. However, it was also the most successful lesson. I have never lied to him since.

Alright, Lets give it a try:

The writer recalls a lesson he learned in his teenage when one day his father asked him to service the car in a garage nearby the village and promise to pick him in the evening. Whereupon leaving the car in the garage, the writer busied himself in a theatre and was late to pick the car back from the garage.He rushed at once to pick his father making excuse that the car took long to be repaired. Confirming from the garage, the reality, his father mourned the moment deciding to walk the 18 miles distance to home to think what went wrong in brought up of his son that he had to see his son lying to him. Seeing his father to travel the tiresome journey by foot, the writer learned the most painful lesson of his life not to lie again.

[QUOTE=warda ahmed;511748]A long walk home

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Dear all

please i am a student i need your help to shorten the below Paragraph to about 50 to 60 words, i mean making a short and meaningfull paragraph from the Story, with the topic sentence.

i will be very greatful if you help me soon
best regards

1- A Long Walk Home

(by: Jakson Bocarro)

I grew up in the south of Spain in a little community called Estepona. I was 16 when one morning my father told me I could drive him into a remote village called Mijas, about 18 miles away, on the condition that I take the car in to be serviced at a nearby garage. Having just learned to drive and hardly ever having the opportunity to use the car, I readily accepted. I drove Dad into Mijas and promised to pick him up at 4 p.m., then drove to a nearby garage and dropped off the car. Because I had a few hours to spare, I decided to catch a couple of movies at a theatre near the garage. However, I became so immersed in the films that I completely lost track of time. When the last movie had finished, I looked down at my watch. It was six o’clock. I was two hours late.

I knew Dad would be angry if he found out I’d been watching movies. He’d never let me drive again. I decided to tell him that the car needed some repairs and that they had taken longer that had been expected. I drove up to the place where we had planned to meet and saw Dad waiting patiently on the corner. I apologized for being late and told him that I’d come as quickly as I could, but the car had needed some major repairs. I’ll never forget the look he gave me.

“I’m disappointed that you feel you have to lie to me, Jackson.”

“What do you mean? I’m telling the truth.”

Dad looked at me again. “When you did not show up, I called the garage to ask if there were any problems, and they told me that you had not yet picked up the car. So you see, I know there were no problems with the car.” A rush of guilt ran through me as I feebly confessed to my trip to the movie theater and the real reason for my tardiness. Dad listened intently as a sadness passed through him.

“I am angry, not with you but with myself. You see, I realize that I have failed as a father if after all these years you feel that you have to lie to me. I have failed because I have brought up a son who cannot even tell the truth to his own father, I’m going to walk home now and contemplate where I have gone wrong all these years”.

“But Dad, its 18 miles to home. It’s dark. You can’t walk home.”

My protests, my apologies and the rest of my utterances were useless. I had let my father down, and I was about to learn one of the most painful lessons of my life. Dad began walking along the dusty roads. I quickly jumped in the car and followed behind, hoping he would relent. I pleaded all the way, telling him how sorry I was, but he simply ignored me, continuing on silently, thoughtfully and painfully. For 18 miles I drove behind him, averaging about five miles per hour.

Seeing my father in so much physical and emotional pain was the most distressing and painful experience that I have ever faced. However, it was also the most successful lesson. I have never lied to him since.[/QUOTE]
Great Story Indeed :)

Let me take a chance..

Jakson Bocarro is recalling most important lesson he got.When his father asked him to drive him to the near by village, than to get the car serviced and finally to pick him back at 4pm.Jakson after dropping the car got stuck in watching movie and got late.seeing his father waiting anxiously,made an excuse that car took longer to be repaired.Father having conformation from garage knew the reality got seriously disappointed and decided to walk all the way long.Seeing his father enduring such stress and strain Jakson got distressed and felt guilty,But learned greatest lesson of his life and resolved never to tell Alie ever again.

long walk home
 

thanks to you both

but please what is the topic sentencs?

many thanks

Topic sentence
 

[QUOTE=warda ahmed;511905]thanks to you both

but please what is the topic sentence?

many thanks[/QUOTE]
Sorry for inconvenience
[I][B]Jakson Bocarro got the most successful lesson by his father that not to ell Alie.[/B][/I]When his father asked him to drive him to the near by village, than to get the car serviced and finally to pick him back at 4pm.Jakson after dropping the car got stuck in watching movie and got late.seeing his father waiting anxiously,made an excuse that car took longer to be repaired.Father having conformation from garage knew the reality got seriously disappointed and decided to walk all the way long.Seeing his father enduring such stress and strain Jakson got distressed and felt guilty,But learned greatest lesson of his life and resolved never to tell Alie ever again.
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[B][I][COLOR=DarkRed]"The topic sentence provides a focus for the reader or listener. It tells what the paragraph is about or the rest paragraph describes it.Such sentence is always a complete sentence expressing an idea about the topic."[/COLOR][/I][/B]

Its me again sorry
 

Dear all

sorry again i need your help but this time will be last time until the next 10 days promise

please shorten this passage for me and write the Topic sentence

as i am a student and need others help

thank you endless



STUDENT LEARNING TEAM
By John N. Gardner and A. Jermo Jewler
From Your College Experience

Research has shows that college students can learn as much, or more, from peers as they do from instructors and textbooks. When students work effectively in a supportive group, the experience can be a very powerful way to improve academic achievement and satisfaction with the learning experience.


Recent interviews with college students as Harvard University revealed that nearly every senior who had been part of a study group considered this experience crucial to his or her academic progress and success. The list below describes several important activities that you and your study group or learning team can collaborate on:

1. Sharing class notes. Team up with other students immediately after class to share and compare notes. One of your teammates may have picked up something you missed or vice versa.

2. Comparing ideas about assigned readings. After completing each week's readings, team up with other students to compare your highlighting and margin notes. See if you all agree on what on what the author's major points were and what information in the chapter you should study for exams.

3. Doing library research. Studies show that many students are with library research and sometimes experience "library anxiety" Forming library research teams is an effective way to develop a social support group for reducing this fear and for locating and sharing information.

4. Meeting with the instructor. Having your team visit the instructor during office hours to seek additional assistance in preparing for exams is an effective team learning strategy for several reasons. If you are shy or unassertive, it may be easier to see an instructor in the company of other students. Your team visit also sends a message to the instructor that you are series about learning.

5. Reviewing test results. After receiving test results, the members of a learning team can review their individual tests together to help one another to identify the sources of their mistakes and to identify and "model" answers that received maximum credit. You can see this information to improve your performance on subsequent tests or assignment.

Not all learning team, however, are equally effective. Sometimes group work is unsuccessful of fails to reach its full potential because insufficient thought was given to how teams should be formed or how they should function. The following suggestions are strategies for maximizing the power of peer collaboration.

1. In forming teams, seek peers who will contribute quality and diversity. Look for fellow students who are motivated: who attend class regularly, are attentive and participate actively while in class, and complete assignments on time. Include teammates from both genders as well as students with different personality characteristics. Such variety will bring different life experiences and different styles of thinking and learning strategies to your team, which can increase both its quality and versatility. Furthermore, choosing only your friends or classmates who have similar interests and lifestyles can often results in a learning group that is more likely to get off track and onto topics that have nothing to do with the learning task.
2. Keep your group size small (three to six classmates). Smaller groups allow for more face-to-face interaction and eye contact and less opportunity for any one individual to shirk his or her responsibility. Also, it's much easier small groups to get together outside of class. Consider choosing an even number of teammates, so you can work in pairs in case the team decided to divide its work into separate parts in case for different numbers to work on.
3. Hold individual team members accountable for contributing to the learning of their teammates. Research on study groups at Harvard University indicates that they are effective only if each member had done the required course work in advance of the group meeting. One way to ensure proper preparation is to ask each member to come to the group meeting prepared with specific information to share with teammates, as well as with questions on which they would like to receive help from the team. Another way to ensure that each teammate prepares properly for the meeting is to have individual members take on different roles or responsibility. For example, each member could assume special responsibility for mastering a particular topic, section, or skill to be taught to the others. This course may be the perfect place for you to form learning team and start putting principles of good teamwork into practice. The teamwork skills you build in this course can be applied to your future courses, particularly those which you find most difficult. What's more, national surveys of employers consistently show that being able to work effectively in teams is one of the most important and valued skills in today's world.