charm strikes the sight but merit wins the soul
 

seniors please check my paragraph and let me know about my mistakes..


This is a famous quote of Alexander Pope and is indeed true.It is a fact that at first meeting personality charm always attracts a person but afterwards it is the noble nature and deeds which wins the heart.Physical beauty writhe's away with time but good deeds shines and remembered forever among others.The best example is that of Lady Diana. She was one of the most beautiful princesses of history yet it was her piety deeds and humble nature due to which she is remembered even today with fondness, love and affection.The there was another historical figure of pious nature known as Mother Teressa.She was a nun and was not considered a beauty but ordinary,plain looking woman.She is famous for her humbleness and noble heart. She used to feed poor children and orphans, provided them with shelter and basic necessities of life.John Keats in his poem Ode to the Green Urn put emphasized on the beauty of truth and honesty.He was of the view that if a person is honest and has a good nature than his that nobleness attract every other soul.So ugly or not, beautiful or plain it does not matter as long as one has a golden heart and soul. Unfortunately, the society in which we live falls for personality charm only. Now a days an individual gain success through his personality and apperance. All that glitters is not gold, no longer applise to the society.

good effort some spelling mistakes are there. Your passage should be divided in short paragraphs;each containing distinctive yet relevant idea.

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Good attempt but requires improvement.There are some spelling as well as grammatical errors that can be corrected through constant practice and guidelines.Spliting it into appropriate paragraphs,maximum 3,can enhance its beauty.

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[QUOTE=aleena fazal;518045]seniors please check my paragraph and let me know about my mistakes..


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This is a famous quote of Alexander Pope and is true, indeed. It is a fact that at first meeting the charm of personality always attracts a person but in the end it is the noble nature and good deeds which wins the heart. Physical beauty writhe's away with time but good deeds shines and, are remembered forever .The best example is that of Lady Diana. She was one of the most beautiful princesses of history yet it was her piety, good deeds and humble nature due to which she is remembered even today with the great love and affection. There was another historical figure of pious nature known as Mother Teresa. She was a nun and was not considered much beautiful but an ordinary plain looking woman. She is famous for her humbleness and noble heart. She used to feed poor children and orphans, provided them with shelter and basic necessities of life. John Keats, in his poem ‘Ode to the Green Urn’, put emphasis on the beauty of truth and honesty. He was of the view that if a person is honest and has a good nature than his that nobleness will attract every other soul. So being ugly, beautiful or plain does not matter as long as one has a pure heart and soul. Unfortunately, the society in which we live falls only for personality charm. Nowadays, an individual gains success through his personality and appearance. ‘All that glitters is not gold’, is no longer applied in the society


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John Keats in his poem Ode to the Green Urn
The name of Ode you mentioned is wrong
It is
Ode to Grecian Urn