Please seniors evaluate my short essay . I will be very thankful

Let me take care of today , tomorrow shall take care of itself

Those who know the value of present, never want to spoil his time in hand. They always make use of the time, available , in fruitful way. These are the people who succeed in life. They have a promising future.
Take the example of an ordinary student. If he concetrates on his study, does not waste his time, and manages his today with proper planning , he surpasses all his colleagues. Even on big scale , those countries that organize theirselves, today , in a comprehnsive way, rule the world. China is our close neighbour. Just after two year of Pakistan independence, in 1948 , it announced its independence. Since that time , all segments of society particpated in the uplift of China. They worked hard and respected their today, and now , they are leading the world in all spheres of life.
Time goes on with its own pace , waiting for none. It is we to exploit it in its running position. History shows that those who understood the value of today, achieved their goals; but the rest all were thrown into oblivion by the future.
Naturally it is tempting to have rest. Different people have different attitude to this enticment. Lazy and dull minded are caught up by this temptation. But intelligent , active and reasonable persons are not prone to it . they make use of the time constructively for their future. It should not be considered as they don’t even take rest. Rather the very purpose of their efforts and hardwork is to achieve rest; the real and permanent rest. They perform all their activities in an organized way that give them ease in today and lasting rest in future.
People who betray their today , future do not forgive them. They become so hopeless for their tomorrow that they even commit suicide. Life is vigorous , active and full of pleasure for those who take care of today.

Your short essay seems to be on a topic ''Take care of today, tomorrow shall take care of itself'' rather than ''Let me take care of today, tomorrow shall take care of itself''.
First completely understand the topic, what is it demanding from you then start your essay.

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@ The Shah Ends

Instead of this, can you elaborate what the phrase mean? What is the demand of the topic?

Very good effort.I have highlighted a few suggestions.Kindly take note of them.Your writing is coherent,which is a good sign.About the topic of the Essay,I would suggest,you focus more on the cause-effect relationship between taking care of the present moment and how it actually affects the future.For example, you can mention what happens if a student puts off his work consistently,the result is that the work load begins to pile up and eventually everything comes crashing on his head.In my opinion, its much better to illustrate your point through examples and analogies.
This was a good essay.Good luck!

There lived a man; lived in nothing but the severe poverty, a poverty which enslaved him and his thoughts. This man dreamt himself as a trader of great success. On waking up, he pledged himself to be one. Obsessed with this, he waited each day for the day he dreamt of. Beside this he did nothing in every today for the tomorrow he dreamt. This led the man to dead-end and the dream remained a dream. As it is said, “you reap what you sow”.
“Today”, according to definition means, the time into the range of 24 hours of this day. It is not the only angle to look at it. “Today” is the reality of life, the proof of being and the feeling of existence. “Today” shows the control over things. It is a pivot link between the past and the future.
As is in the saying, “Who has seen tomorrow”, philosophically questions us about the reality of tomorrow. Is tomorrow real or are we rebirth again with the new sun and given other chances to continue from the same stage where we left? Though tomorrow is real, but it is transformed into “today” when it is reached.
What made the man fail to get his dreamt destiny is a very critical point to look in order to understand what stops us. Is there something stopping to work on today? For some it may be lack of motivation, lack of reward or lack of resources while some may consider hope as a self-satisfying tool, but with a deep insight one can find that the mother of all the hindrances is the act of holding so tight on tomorrow without laying feet on the platform of today. Today is the only thing that matters in the journey of achieving a better tomorrow, so today needs some special care.
There is something quite fascinating in this saying. This saying have ignored completely the past. Though, past possess importance but when you sail for a journey, you must not look back at the shores. Past is a mean of lesson but continuous reminder will lead to distress and ultimately failure. Religiously, the sinner is forgiven to many of the sins of high degree and is supposed to watch out the present in order to make an upright future.
Procrastination is the term used for those who rely on tomorrow; a tomorrow which never comes. They sit in the train of tomorrow, holding back the today at old house. They are extremely optimistic and wait for tomorrow, till they become feeble and fragile to act and regret the life they are left with. Present brings hardships which shape the future, which defines the real person behind the materialistic body. Running away from them, denying the truth that many todays may come but many have surely passed, they prefer to rest till something might wake them up in a forceful way as life does.
The most important of hindrances is the past. It is always in your pocket; not going to leave you. For many past is a haunting nightmare. It may become a source of motivation or the depression. Often people fall in depression after setbacks in life, of them, very few make their way to the top and get what belonged to them. They throw their past aside, look steadily on the bright future with all the hopes and work on today. Today is the only cure of the past scars and the only key of success for the future.
Hakeem Luqman says, “Never left on tomorrow, what is today’s task”. This is the theory on which china and japan, generally every developed country, have worked. Japan though famous to do twice a day’s work in single day. It indicates the hard work and dedication of the nations, doing more than what is required. They plan for future, look on it once, and then keep their eyes firm on the each day’s work.
Future is predicted but can never be certain. Whatever work and efforts done on today can never go in vain. Chunks of today unite and make a single future. Every chunk needs attention and care. Each chunk, big or small, will play its part to form the shape of future. A little dark spot on the face can ruin the outlook; similarly I bad today can ruin the future.
Future is of mere importance as it will also be transited into today one day. So, the present time must be utilized in way to make the dreams come true. Fear of future must be eradicated because fear snatches happiness and diverts from the aim. All can be contained in this saying, “today is an opportunity for better tomorrow”.

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Let me take care of today, tomorrow shall take care of itself.

The above phrase is not only to beguile us. In fact, a solemn message lies under this phrase. We guys have surplus plans for tomorrow and do nothing today. Every time, when this tomorrow becomes today, we plan more and leave it for the imminent tomorrow. It is applicable to us and to our country as well. Every other government in Pakistan orchestrates a plethora of projects for our development and does nothing immediately. Believe me, all those plans go in vain.
Let us have a look at Japan. It was completely devastated after those ferocious nuclear attacks. Even, one can see it’s after effects on their people. Albeit, they worked hard and now, their state is counted in one of the most developed countries in this world. All they did, is strive for today. And, their present attempts secure their future.
We, like Japan, should take care of our today to make our future glistening. Languidness is going to lead us nowhere. History reminds, those who leave today’s work for tomorrow get nothing but desperation. We, currently, are entangled in to a heap of problems and the only panacea is to try. Trying for today is automatically going to glow our future. In the last, it would be pertinent to say, ‘Those, who are vigil, procure’.

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