your over all ideas and paragraph is good but you concentrate only on meaning not on objective of this prover. good essay , paragraph-always is that in which we give examples as well as quote . i like this try i hope you will continuous this work. this prove very helpful for us. now first complete my essay then start new topic. are you agree:

Ok what should be our next topic give suggetion.

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Yes i was just defining the topic just little gone to the objective. Well i will try to improve my writing.

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our next topic is are four pillars of state responsible for what ails Pakistan today?? . you can use different stuff for clearance of your thinking. i am waiting for your paragraph at least of 200 words with appropriate examples and quote .

Ok i am going to write on this topic but this topic is not any expansion that we give examples and quotations it is analytical try to analyse it. Ok after writing i will paste here.

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It is general perception that infrastructure and organization of state are based on its four pillar 1- legislature 2- executive.3- judiciary and4- media. Among all these media is more power weapon which has power or ability to reach in the mind of the society and people. It acts as a dogwatch in the society and has power to make the zero to hero or vice versa. Development and progress are hidden in the coordination among these four pillars .it is important to analyze fundamental role of these institution coordination between chain of command execution of task in order to fix responsibilities in back ground of current ailing situation of Pakistan .judiciary play role of safeguarding in interest of people and state in the light of law and help of executive. development and progress in only when these four pillar of state work in coherence with each other. have pakistani state,s pillar faltered , is there a problem in enacting law enforcing them and mitigation the dispute degarding their meanings and application goes the onus of state disintegration . problem of pakistan today are of variegated nature from issue of terrorism to ominous energy shortfall woes abound. on the other hand lackluster performance of state four pillars remain heart-wrenching compounding the citizen problem.

Good analyses but Your paragraph is entirely out of order. You must outline first then write it. For such topics, Firstly introduce the subject, then body and finally conclusion. As you have initially started from Press Media, no doubt it is more powerful but Legislature, Executive and Judiciary are dominant pillars so introduce in descending order. And try to write supporting ideas especially near near or next to the expression. And again you are making too many grammatical mistakes. Try to improve them initially otherwise it would be hard to avoid them in future as 'old habits die hard'. Well good try keep practicing. And this topic was multiple so writing it in 200 words was difficult for me but i have tried my best to encompass it in short paragraph. Here is my paragraph.


Are the four pillars of state responsible for what ails Pakistan today.

Government connotes for the wheels of a state. And each of its factors has been in a particular charge. So it is justified to pose the authority if there is any kind of disorder in the state. Today Pakistan is said to be based on four pillars namely Legislature, Executive, Judiciary & Press Media. Legislature makes and changes laws, the backbone of the country. Executive administers those laws and has a dominant role in the country. Judiciary is in charge to administer justice and provide equal rights to the people. And Press Media, a modern power, which has a supreme role to create intermediary between the rule and ruled, expose the realities and manifest the neutral perspective of the state. But unfortunately today in Pakistan from law makers to enforcers, most of the authorities have lost their essence. Irrespective of circumstantial needs, legislature is content with centuries old inherited laws. No strict laws are made that could uproot crises as corruption, which in turn has spurred many other problems like economic deficit, poverty, crime and illiteracy. Executive despite of its dominant role in most of the sectors of the state, is always found inclined before self-interests, in consequence there are always found revolts against authorities, making law and order situations. Judiciary has laid its price, losing almost all of its credibility and portraying the lopsided form of justice. And the fourth pillar Press Media, that has a unique prestige in the state, has also lost its dignity, creating political affiliations for self-interests. It has ruined public trust due to making the problems like corruption possible in its shade. Thus, behind this highly debauched condition of the state is the ineffectiveness, lack of accountability and disintegration of its all the four pillars and without any reluctance can be said all responsible for what ails Pakistan today.

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thank you so much your paragraph is really better from my paragraph i already was not satisfied from my expansion. now after your suggestion i again try to write on this topic further and paste here. your express your ideas in better ways however some improvement should be needed as like according to me all four pillar or institute instead of performing their duties in perfect manner and coordination with other institute come face to face in clash which giving chance to our foe and anti state factor to destroy or damage our whole system and responsible for what ail pakistan today. our next topic will be SWEET ARE USES OF ADVERSITY. next topic will from toward you.

please seniors check my short essay and point out my shortcomings

EVERY CLOUD HAS A SILVER LINING
When dark and thick clouds cover the sun and sun becomes apparently invisible, this seen does not look pleasant. But, if we see the clouds carefully then we come to know that there is a silver lining below the edges of clouds which is proof that the sun is somewhere behind the clouds. As time passes and clouds move somewhere else, the sun appears with its full glory. The proverb basically tells that one should not be pessimist in life. He must be optimistic in life as sorrows and troubles are part of life. One should not be disappointed whatever the conditions exist. Whenever there are sorrows, there must be happiness nearby. Whenever there is shadow , light must be somewhere nearby. It is rule of nature that sorrows and happiness exist side by side and this is what we call it life. Because,if there exist only happiness and no worry of problems or sorrows, then the charm of life will dissaper and vise versa.
The massacre of about 132 children in Army Public School Peshawar by TTP is the most brutal incident of the history of Pakistan. But, if we closely observe the incident then we come to know that this incident has united the whole nation. Now the whole nation is standing beside our military and political leadership. But before this carnage, a large section of the society was of view that we are fighting someone else war and this is not our ownwar. But this incident not only changed this thought but also united the whole nation. The National Action Plan and 21st amendment in constitution are proofs that now the whole nation, civil and military leaderships are at one page . This incident proved as a turning point for Pakistan and now we have realized that this is not someone else war but our own.
In nut shell, we can say that one should not be disappointed and must remain optimistic in life as sorrows and troubles are part of life. These troubles and sorrows are not permanent and sooner or later they will be changed by happiness, as every cloud has a silver lining.
About 300 words

good expansion and good effort but according to me example of kids carnage is not good here . this proverb show the hardship of life which we face in the journey of success. pishawer carnage is heinous atrocity. however our third partner will also give comment on it may be i wrong. however overall good effort

good dear one more advice to add here that never use proverb in the short essay

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