Please Check My Expansion Titled 'The Impossible Is Often The Untried'
 

Hi guys, I want sincere opinion and review on the expansion I just wrote. Please rate it on the basis of relevance, coherence, and logic. All sorts of responses are warmly welcomed. Here it goes:

The Impossible Is Often The Untried

One of the many qualities that distinguish a human from other species in the world is his sense of exploration and curiosity. Humanity is going through a never-ending evolutionary process. A man attains a plethora of skills and abilities that he can employ to achieve success in every walk of life. Whenever we face a new problem in our daily affairs, we aim to solve it through our curious nature, intelligence and determination. We might fail once; we might fail twice; but continuous research, effort and proactivity will lead us to succeed in what we initially thought as impossible.
Therefore, nothing seems impossible to a man who has not tried it at least once in his life. If a person were pessimist, he would always blabber about it and would find himself in a glass-being-half-empty sort of situation. An optimist, on the other hand, would find opportunity in every problem, utilize all his resources and try to solve it in order to make it possible.
Pakistan Movement, for instance, was a culmination of continuous struggle and resolution of Indian Muslims to get an independent territory for their fellow Muslims. Had they not been firm and determined in their resolve and tried hard to convince British rulers to partition India on the basis of Two Nation Theory, Pakistan could have been a dream impossible to achieve.
Similarly, humans used to think it is impossible to go to other planetary objects. But continuous research and efforts in this regard have led the scientists to explore the other planets such as Mars and even recommend the possibility of life there. So nothing seems impossible to a person, who tries to achieve it by all means. But hard work and diligence is the key to make impossible thing as possible.

[QUOTE=UshnaSabir;796596]Hi guys, I want sincere opinion and review on the expansion I just wrote. Please rate it on the basis of relevance, coherence, and logic. All sorts of responses are warmly welcomed. Here it goes:

The Impossible Is Often The Untried

One of the many qualities that distinguish a human from other species in the world is his sense of exploration and curiosity. Humanity is going through a never-ending evolutionary process. A man attains a plethora of skills and abilities that he can employ to achieve success in every walk of life. Whenever we face a new problem in our daily affairs, we aim to solve it through our curious nature, intelligence and determination. We might fail once; we might fail twice; but continuous research, effort and proactivity will lead us to succeed in what we initially thought as impossible.
Therefore, nothing seems impossible to a man who has not tried it at least once in his life. If a person were pessimist, he would always blabber about it and would find himself in a glass-being-half-empty sort of situation. An optimist, on the other hand, would find opportunity in every problem, utilize all his resources and try to solve it in order to make it possible.
Pakistan Movement, for instance, was a culmination of continuous struggle and resolution of Indian Muslims to get an independent territory for their fellow Muslims. Had they not been firm and determined in their resolve and tried hard to convince British rulers to partition India on the basis of Two Nation Theory, Pakistan could have been a dream impossible to achieve.
Similarly, humans used to think it is impossible to go to other planetary objects. But continuous research and efforts in this regard have led the scientists to explore the other planets such as Mars and even recommend the possibility of life there. So nothing seems impossible to a person, who tries to achieve it by all means. But hard work and diligence is the key to make impossible thing as possible.[/QUOTE]

The topic implicitly emphasizes on the word 'often'. Hence, you should take into consideration that impossible is not [B][I][U]always [/U][/I][/B]the untried. Therefore, you should also mention the difficulties or limitations posed in order to make some untried possible as it is not humanly possbile to conquer some impossible phenomena. You should also focus on the limitations of human mind and body. Not so long but just for the sake of comparision.

Length is not up to the mark, dear expand it more and divided it at least in three paragraphs then we will be able to check your write up properly. However, your attempted quite well. It would have been more better, though.

[QUOTE=RoadBlock;796614]The topic implicitly emphasizes on the word 'often'. Hence, you should take into consideration that impossible is not [B][I][U]always [/U][/I][/B]the untried. Therefore, you should also mention the difficulties or limitations posed in order to make some untried possible as it is not humanly possbile to conquer some impossible phenomena. You should also focus on the limitations of human mind and body. Not so long but just for the sake of comparision.[/QUOTE]
Thank you so much for critical mistake I committed in my first attempt. I will request you to regularly review my work as I will be posting more expansions in coming days. Thanks again.

"The impossible is often the untried"

Nothing in the world seems impossible for the people who passionately believes in the success. It is lacking in the personality of a person to give up by tagging it impossible or not achievable. It is the belief and untiring efforts which demarcate the line between impossible and possible. It requires an optimistic approach and a clear vision. Definitely, it must be difficult to achieve, but nothing is impossible as the word itself says i-m-possible. One of the greatest personality seen in the history of the world is Nelson Mandela. He sacrificed his life for a noble cause of equality for the black community in one of the most rigid caste community of the whole world. As a consequence, he was jailed for 28 years and tortured. But his everlasting effort paved the way towards the success and the rights were recognized by the then government. If Mandela though it as impossible, the blacks would have still been neglected and denied of their rights. As he himself said, "It always sees impossible until it is done". The world has progressed manifold. All the inventions were a result of an impossible aim, directed towards its unrealistic achievement. Nobody could imagine in the 18th century that a machine name as Airplane will be able to fly, but 19th century saw flying planes. Similarly, the people wouldn't have thought that man will be able to walk on the moon. But the Appolo Missions resulted in a new history making. It required an untiring effort by NASA to accomplish this objective. They weren't able to hit the target on the first attempt, Appolo 1 blew on the launch, but they again tried and Neil Armstrong became the first man to walk on the Moon. In a nutshell, nothing is impossible in this world to achieve. It only requires the effort and the will of the person.