Seniors are requested kindly help me in building my written expression..
as i belong to a village and CSS Forum is the only facility available to me..
Need your suggestions as it is my very first attempt

"Democratic Republic of Syria was the closest ally of Russia after the Suez crises.In ancient language Syria was also called “Surya”.The civilization of Syria is one of the ancient civilizations of the World.Ummayid ruled over this region for at least 80 years,later on Abbassiads occupied it.Syria,s history is full of historical crises.its population is about 25 million.its majority population is of Sunni belief,but its minority population have been ruling over it since last 55 years.it happened with a military revolution,that the leader of Arab Nationalist Bat Party Hafiz Ul Asad took over the Government. After his death the government was transferred to his son Bashar Ul Asad.He inherited the kingship and still it continues.In recent times there came a democratic wave in Arab World and it got roots in Egypt.Although,according to protests Yemen took the lead,there were more protests in Yemen that the ruler of Yemen took asylum in Saudia.It has always been the politics of the English to transfer rule to the minority group,so that when a revolution comes or it is desire it becomes easy to remove the minority group from power.
Those days are not very far when the attempts to bring the change in Arab world would continued and to push them towards their desired policies.People can be arosed by dream of freedom and fundamental rights where civilians dictators are ruling in the name of democracy. The slogans of Human Rights and Freedom are very fascinating.But what is the benefit of such democracy where people are deprived of basic facilities of life and sucide,unemployment,killings have the freedom.It is obvious,that the idea of human rights and freedom is meaningless without economic , educational and health freedom.Such type of movement is in process in Syeria.
Syria is of great significance according to its geographical and strategic location.In north of Syria is Iraq and Turkey lies in West-an important and trustworthy ally of Nato and West.its boundries are attached to the Kurdish area of Turkey,in this region there is a city named,Allepo,where majority is of Sunni Sect.Christians are hardly 7%.Revolt started from this border area,because if this area is occupied then the supply line of Syria with Lebnon will be cut off,which is the support of HizaUllah of Lebnon,In this way Isralei domination would prevail in this area.In the past,Lebnon proved an iron wall against Israel ".

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dear good attempt but,Few points which one must keep in mind before writing any paragraph:
1. First line or sentence of the paragraph should be your Topic sentence (the sentence on which your whole paragraph depends)
2. The second sentence onwards all the sentences are called specific support ( the sentences which support your topic sentence)
3. You must discuss one idea, not two and three, in one paragraph.
4. Don's try to use bombastic language, infect, Dawn news paper pattern is highly appreciated.
5. Every sentence of your paragraph must be coherent and precise, they should be look like a necklaces . in addition they must beautifully linked with each other and ultimately support the main sentence that is your topic sentence.
one more thing TRANSITIONAL WORDS IS THE BREATH OF ANY PARAGRAPH such as HOWEVER, FURTHERMORE, MOREOVER, NO WONDER which helps the reader to know what are they going to read in the next sentence or paragraph. regards.

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Thanks Alot Ahmed Faisal Sir...i want to write a paragraph daily and want to be checked by the seniors.Would You plz check as i dont have other source ...

First of all don,t call me sir coz i am not sir. infect i am your brother. secondly, i can check you paragraph,but it would be better that you must get your paragraph checked by a senior CSP officer or a good English teacher in your locality. it would make your vision broad. on the other hand, there are a lot of senior most members in this forum who can check your writing well. regards.

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"Our Lord, give us the good in this world and the good in the hereafter." (Al-Qur'an, 2:201).