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Default How to improve this sentence? "Replaced over 30% of equivalent workload of supervisor
Hi everyone, I was previously an intern with a securities firm, and is now trying to add this experience into my CV.

During my internship I did 30% of my supervisor's work and so reduced 30% of her workload.

I wrote in my CV, "Replaced over 30% of equivalent workload of supervisor daily in brokerage activities",

but I just feel that it doesn't sound right. How should I change it? (grammatically and in terms of style)

Thanks!!

Jacky
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Hi everyone, I was previously an intern with a securities firm, and is now trying to add this experience into my CV.

During my internship I did 30% of my supervisor's work and so reduced 30% of her workload.

I wrote in my CV, "Replaced over 30% of equivalent workload of supervisor daily in brokerage activities",

but I just feel that it doesn't sound right. How should I change it? (grammatically and in terms of style)

Thanks!!

Jacky

your's fine.
But as you've asked so here is mine, you might consider:
''I absolved of my superwiser's 30% official (office-linked) responsibilities/ assignments/ amenabilities/ avocations etc.''
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