Seniors please check my precis and highlight my areas of weakness.

"Four score and seven years ago our fathers brought forth on this continent a new nation, conceived in liberty and dedicated to the proposition that all men are created equal. Now we are engaged in a great civil war, testing whether that nation or any nation so conceived and so dedicated can long endure. We are met on a great battlefield of that war. We have come to dedicate a portion of that field as a final resting-place for those who here gave their lives that that nation might live. It is altogether fitting and proper that we should do this. But in a larger sense, we cannot dedicate, we cannot consecrate, we cannot hallow this ground. The brave men, living and dead who struggled here have consecrated it far above our poor power to add or detract. The world will little note nor long remember what we say here, but it can never forget what they did here. It is for us the living rather to be dedicated here to the unfinished work which they who fought here have thus far so nobly advanced. It is rather for us to be here dedicated to the great task remaining before us --that from these honored dead we take increased devotion to that cause for which they gave the last full measure of devotion-- that we here highly resolve that these dead shall not have died in vain, that this nation under God shall have a new birth of freedom, and that government of the people, by the people, for the people shall not perish from the earth." (268 words) [/SIZE]

Precis:
Eighty-Seven years ago this nation was created with the notion of liberty and equality for all men. Now this nation is confronting a Civil war, to testify whether a nation created as such could exist. This address is organized to honor the martyrs of the civil war. They gave up their lives for this cause. The world would forget this ceremony, but it could never forget their heroic deeds. It is responsibility of those living to carry on the cause for which they sacrificed. (84 words)

Your Writing Needs Glooming
Read some Articles and Material Regarding Literature
Get on Vocabulary
And Then Try for Precise

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Sometimes the reason of the reason in your mind is the reason of your reasoning problem,,,

1. No need to mention years in Precise Draft.
2. Do not borrow words from original paragraph. Use your own words.
3. Main Idea is the sacrifice of our ancestors and we need to follow them for better country so no need to focus on Civil War again and again.
4. Grasp the main idea and write that one in simplified form.
5. You forgot to mention title as well.

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The world is changed by your example, not by your opinion !

The central idea/theme of the paragraph has clearly eluded you. You couldn't convey it in your precis. Instead, you cherrypicked a few bits and pieces from within the paragraph and merged them together to make a precis. Your grammar needs a lot of attention as well. I suggest you take coaching for that purpose. Altogether it was a decent attempt. Keep practicing.

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"Everything the light touches, is our kingdom."

At the end of precis
Given Precis= 268 words
target= 89 words
My precis = 89 words
Title=

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Don't lose hope. When the sun goes down, the stars come out.

Eighty seven years ago our forefathers built a nation on the basis that all humans are equal.We are now gathered by wars.Many brave people gave sacrifices to make this nation sacred.But we are too poor in our strength to make this nation sacred.people may forget what they have said but can never forget what they did. It is now upto us to finish their purpose.Their struggle and death for the nation should not go in vain.This nation will again grow up and get freedom.