Title: Trip to Cherokee.

The Author had a hard time choosing a tour during his vacation last May. After much deliberation and suggestion from his friend, John, he chose to make a trip to Cherokee. They first visited a town, Qualla boundary, whose natural beauty and tribal culture awestruck them. After that they visited the souvenir shop. Shop contained a range of old, tribal products. Shop keeper, who introduced himself as George, welcomed them and invited them for a lunch after a long chat. George apprised them of his hectic routine during the tour season; his past profession; and about local economy, which depended on multiple sources, including entertainment. Author’s final stop was at a museum where a variety of symbols of Cherokee cosmology were displayed.

PRECIS

Last May, the author and his friend, John visited Cherokee county, Oklahoma - a relatively quieter tourist attraction. They went to the beautiful town of Qualla Boundary, where reenactment of 18th century lifestyle in Oconaluftee Village, introduced tourists to Cherokee’s history. The duo stumbled upon a souvenir shop, decorated with traditional artifacts and had lunch with George - the outgoing owner of the shop. George was a former woodcutter, who switched to his current profession due to want of income. George told told them that aside from trade, the Cherokee earn extra money through small businesses during the tourist season. Finally, they saw some historic articles in a local museum. On his return, the author longed for the place and hoped for a new adventure.

Topic: An Excursion to Cherokee
Words in Precis : 125

Seems fine

After much discussion and recommendations from his friends, John and the author chose to make a trip to Cherokee in last year May. Their first visit to Qualla Boundary really fascinated them with natural beauty and tribal culture. After it they visited a souvenir shop, containing a range of antique and tribal products, where shopkeeper welcomed them warmly and offered a lunch after a long chat on diverse issues. A museum, exhibiting a variety of Cherokee cosmology, was author's final stop during his trip to Cherokee.

Word Count: 86

After much discussion and recommendations from his friends, John and the author chose to make a trip to Cherokee in last year May. Qualla Boundary, their first stop, fascinated them with natural beauty and tribal culture. Later they visited a souvenir shop, where shopkeeper welcomed them warmly and offered a lunch after a long chat on diverse subjects. A museum, exhibiting a variety of Cherokee cosmology, was author's final stop during his trip to Cherokee.

I think this one is better with 75 word count. I feel its more concised and highlights the important parts

Too much concise

isn't it acceptable? :/

The writer found it hard to choose a place for his vacations. Finally he decided to visit Qualla Boundary with John in vacation which was encircled with splendid natural beauty. The natives were rich in 18th century's tribal inheritance which they used to display six times weekly in summer nights. They found souvenir shops with the help of natives. Traditional instruments were the specialty of these shops. They met English speaking shopkeeper named George who told them that he remained busy in tour season but in off period people find other means of livelihood. One of them is Bingo Weekend which entertain people with Super Jackpot and warrior game exclusively and brings people to play and win money in a big hall. The writer pledge to visit another place after enjoying arts of handmade items at museum as his last stop.

words in précis=141
Title: A depiction of traditional Qualla Boundary

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Last May, the author had trouble in finding a destination which offered both fascination and tranquility. Ultimately, Cherokee – a county in Oklahoma, suggested by John obtained the green light for boarding. In Cherokee, they started the trip with Qualla Boundry – a town blessed with natural scenery, offering tourists a snapshot of Cherokee’s history. Then, troubled by the language barrier, they managed to reach the souvenir shops where a diverse collection of local products was on display. Amidst this, they met with George; a local vendor who shared with them his own life struggle while discussing the different occupations Cherokee’s take up to survive off-peak period. Lastly, they visited the museum which showcased a wide array of artistic work.

Critique will be highly appreciated.

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