Please check my precis, 1994 paper.

[choochi]

AoA, I don't have much experience in writing precis but I have been practicing, and I wanted to know if I am advancing well enough or not. Please check my precis and give me pointers to improve it or highlight other points if you like. I will be really grateful.

Here is the original passage:


“Education does not develop autonomously: it tends to be a mirror of society and is seldom at the cutting edge of social change. It is retrospective, even conservative, since it teaches the young what others have experienced and discovered-about the world. The future of education will be shaped not by educators, but by changes in demography, technology and the family. It sends - to prepare students to live and work in their society - are likely to remain stable, but its means are likely to change dramatically”.

“Schools, colleges and universities will be redefined in fundamental ways: who is educated,how they are educated, where they are educated - all are due for upheaval. But their primary responsibility will be much the same as it is now: to teach knowledge of languages, science,history, government, economics, geography, mathematics and the arts, as well as the skills necessary to understand today’s problems and to use its technologies. In the decades ahead, there will be a solid consensus that, as Horace Mann, an American educator, wrote in 1846,“Intelligence is a primary ingredient in the wealth of nations”. In recognition of the power of this idea, education will be directed purposefully to develop intelligence as a vital national resource”.

“Even as nations recognize the value of education in creating human capital, the institutions that provide education will come under increasing strain. State systems of education may not survive demographic and technological change. Political upheavals in unstable regions and the case of international travel will ensure a steady flow of immigrants, legal and illegal, from poor nations to rich ones. As tides of immigration sweep across the rich world, the receiving nations have a choice: they can assimilate the newcomers to the home culture, or they can expect a proliferation of cultures within their borders. Early this century, state systems assimilated new comers and taught them how to fit in. Today social science frowns on assimilation, seeing it as a form of cultural coercion, so state systems of education are likely to eschew cultural imposition. In effect, the state schools may encourage trends that raise doubts about the purpose or necessity of a state system of education”. (Diane Ravich).


And here is my precis:

Diane Ravich contends that education is a reflection of the society, and is shaped by past experiences of elders and changes in demography, technology and family. In future too, it will be affected by changes in society but its end results of providing skills to students and enhancing nation’s human capital resources will not change, there will be a growing consensus on importance of education to a nation’s wealth, and nations will actively invest in it. However, increasing number of immigrants will be the cause of a major cultural shift in western society in coming decades, with very little resistance to it as cultural assimilation is now frowned upon unlike past. This cultural shift will affect education profoundly and may encourage trends that question the very necessity of education.

[The Elegent]

Your precis should be one third of original passage.
Precis should be compact yet comprehensible and try not to borrow words from passage.

[infinite optimism]

The methods of imparting education will change with the advancements in technology and diversification in demography.With the basic purpose of education remains the same,honing intelligence will be a primary goal.