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Haseen Malik Thursday, February 09, 2017 12:45 AM

Solved Precis of 1995
 
Please have a look at my precis.

[B]Original passage,1995:[/B]

When you see a cockroach or a bed-hug your first reaction is one of disgust and that is immediately, followed by a desire to exterminate the offensive creature. Later, in the garden, you see a butterfly or a dragonfly, and you are filled with admiration at its beauty and grace. Man’s feelings towards insects are ambivalent. He realizes that some of them for example, -flies and cockroaches arc threats to health. Mosquitoes and tsetse flies have in the past sapped the vitality of entire tribes or nations. Other insects are destructive and cause enormous losses. Such arc locusts, which can wipe out whole areas of crops in minutes; and termites, whose often insidious ravages, unless checked at an early stage, can end in the destructing of entire rows –of houses. Yet men’s ways of living may undergo radical changes if certain species of insects were to become extinct. Bees, for example, pollinate the flowers of many plants which are food sources. In the past, honey was the only sweetening agent known to man in some remote parts of the world. Ants, although they bite and contaminate man’s food are useful scavengers which consume waste material that would otherwise pollute the environment. Entomologists who have studied insect fossils believe them to have inhabited the earth for nearly 400 million years. Insects live in large numbers almost everywhere in the world, from the hottest deserts and the deepest caves to the peaks of-high Mountains and even the snows of the polar caps. Some insect communities are complex in organizations, prompting men to believe that they possess an ordered intelligence. But such organized behavior is clearly not due to- developed brains. If we have to compare them to humans, bee and ant groups behave like extreme totalitarian societies. Each bee or ant seems to have a determined role to play instinctively and does so without deviation. The word “instinct” is often applied to insect behavior. But some insect behavior appears so clear that one tends to think that some sort of intelligence is at work. For example, the worker bee, upon relating to the hive after having found a new source of nectar, communicates his discovery by a kind of dance which tells other bees the direction and distance away of the nectar. [COLOR="red"](380 words) [/COLOR]

[B]PRÉCIS 1995:[/B]
[B][U][CENTER][SIZE="5"]Entomology[/SIZE]
[/CENTER][/U][/B] Man response towards insects is ambivalent. He likes some insects, while kill some other. These insects may be harmful or useful for human that depend on type of insects. For instance, insects like mosquitoes, tsetse flies, cockroaches, bed-hugs, locusts, and termites are not only hazardous for living organisms but also are capable of destroying a whole habitat. While other insects like bees, butter flies, dragon flies, and ants are not only admirable but also useful, that help in plants pollination, honey formation, and waste material decomposition. Moreover, studies show that insects has inhabited in every habitat very long time. Also, it is believed that some insects possess intelligence, as reflected from their organization and task division- termed as "instincts". However, the male bee way of communication is something that falls outside the scope of instincts. [COLOR="Red"](130 words)[/COLOR]





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Muhammad Owais Siddiqui Friday, February 10, 2017 08:54 AM

its good man. Let me point out a few things:
Cockroaches and flies are not listed as the one which can destroy the habitats in the original paragraph.
4th line of your precis is not in coherence with the rest of your passage and doesn't provide any relevance.
Last two lines need a little more precision, as you intermixed intelligence with instincts.
Topic is good but I'll appreciate if that could be a little more precis, amm like 'Insects' Behaviour and Human Perceptions'
I don't know, please guide me if you think m wrong :) Best of luck


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