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Precis, CE-2017; Word Count: 443

All the evil in this world is brought about by persons who are always up and doing, but do not know when they ought to be up and nor what they ought to be doing. The devil, I take it, is still the busiest creature in the universe, and I can quite imagine him denouncing laziness and becoming angry at the smallest waste of time. In his kingdom, I will bet, nobody is allowed to do nothing, not even for a single afternoon. The world, we all freely admit, is in a muddle, but I for one do not think that it is laziness that has brought it to such a pass. It is not the active virtues that it lacks but the passive ones: it is capable of anything but kindness and a little steady thought. There is still plenty of energy in the world(there never were more fussy people about), but most of it is simply misdirected. If ,for example, in July 1914, when there was some capital idling weather, everybody-- emperors, kings, archdukes, statesmen, generals, journalists, had been suddenly struck with an intense desire to do nothing, just to hang about in the sunshine and consume tobacco, then we should all have been much better off than we are now. But no, the doctrine of the strenuous life still went unchallenged; there must be no time wasted, something must be done. And, as we know, something was done. Again, suppose our statesmen, instead of rushing off to Versailles with a bundle of ill-digested notions and a great deal of energy to dissipate, had all taken a fortnight off, away from all correspondence and interviews and what not, and had simply lounged about on some hill side or other apparently doing nothing for the first time in their energetic lives, then they might have gone to their so-called Peace Conference and come away again with their reputations still unsoiled and the affairs of the world in good trim. Even at the present time, if half the politicians in Europe would relinquish the notion that laziness is a crime and go away and do nothing for a little space, we should certainly gain by it. Other examples come crowding into the mind. Thus, every now and then, certain religious sects hold conferences; but though there are evils abroad that are mountains high, though the fate of civilization is still doubtful, the members who attend these conferences spend their time condemning the length of ladies' skirts and the noisiness of dance bands. They would all be better employed lying flat on their backs somewhere, staring at the sky and recovering their mental health.

Precis Title: When Inactivity is a Virtue

According to the author, the world is suffering from the actions of the ignorant. The devil, therefore, is the busiest creature that hates laziness and waste of time. Today, the world is in disorder not because of lack of activity but too much of it. It is a result of actions that are unkind and without thought or direction. For example, in past, it would have been better if nothing was done in July 1914; or, if the statesmen went off on a vaction than to Versailles. In present, the world would benefit even if half the European politicians do nothing for a while. Similarly, it would also gain from the inactivity of members of religious conferences who, despite more pressing matters at hand, discuss only the petty issues.

(Precis + Title: 134)

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I am not good at precis myself but there are few things that I would like to point out. please be considerate I am not an authority over this subject matter so apologies in advance if I happen to pin point anything which is correct in nature.
1. your title is not correct structure wise- inactivity is a virtue is misfit, it could have been laziness maybe.
2. your precis contains the similar vocabulary which is in passage, like busiest creatures etc. As far as I know this practice is not encouraged.
3. you have quoted an example, example and rhetoric are avoided in precis, unless you think theme is compromised without its mentioning.
4. you have mentioned "according to author" , i believe we have to use such words if the original passage is a narration or personal experience
5. you have mentioned "suffering from the actions of the ignorant", it should be other way around-suffering from the ignorant actions .
6. if you read the original passage, it has proper opening statement, body which explains writer's point and the conclusion in the end. precis is supposed to maintain the same tone.
7. read few lists of "one word substitution" it helps in precis.

P.S : i know these are lots of comment, but it is just how i felt about the precis and i think there is a room for improvement. you have tried, that's what matters. good luck for future endeavors

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Thank you so much. I will pay attention to these points in my next attempt.

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Point No. 03:

Yes, examples are to be excluded. But, then the word count suffers. If, instead, I am to put analysis at the place of examples, it sounds like additions outside of passage. What to do in such a scenario?

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"If ,for example, in July 1914, when there was some capital idling weather, everybody-- emperors, kings, archdukes, statesmen, generals, journalists, had been suddenly struck with an intense desire to do nothing, just to hang about in the sunshine and consume tobacco, then we should all have been much better off than we are now. "
this was the part which is an example , and is totally avoidable considering the passage word count.

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Title: Laziness

Please check and comment on my precis.
Title: The virtues of laziness

The world is in a state of chaos due to the overly-active people who are ignorant about how and when to act. The problem is not the laid back attitude but the hasty decisions. Important and rather bleak world events are the by-products of the illusion of not wasting any time thinking and taking action there and then. Forgoing this attitude of ours might prove beneficial for mankind. The future cannot be predicted and the evils might not be curbed easily but there is still hope for those who hold logical discussions instead of bickering non-sense. All they need is to have some breathing space and everything will be fine and dandy. (112)

Title: Laziness is better than misdirected energies
It is not the lazy people but active people who are bringing harm to this world. Devil is also very active and he doesn't like laziness. The world today is in a crisis due to a lack of kindness and a little study thought rather than lack of activity. If our ancestors did nothing instead of what they did our conditions would have been better today. Even if The Statesman had vacations rather than struggling for global peace the world today would be more peaceful. Even today the laziness of our politicians would benefit us more than their activism. Those religious Scholars spending their energies but cannot differentiate the significance of each problem are also not doing any good to this world