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All the evil in this world is brought about by persons who are always up and doing, but do not know when they ought to be up and nor what they ought to be doing. The devil, I take it, is still the busiest creature in the universe, and I can quite imagine him denouncing laziness and becoming angry at the smallest waste of time. In his kingdom, I will bet, nobody is allowed to do nothing, not even for a single afternoon. The world, we all freely admit, is in a muddle, but I for one do not think that it is laziness that has brought it to such a pass. It is not the active virtues that it lacks but the passive ones: it is capable of anything but kindness and a little steady thought. There is still plenty of energy in the world(there never were more fussy people about), but most of it is simply misdirected. If ,for example, in July 1914, when there was some capital idling weather, everybody-- emperors, kings, archdukes, statesmen, generals, journalists, had been suddenly struck with an intense desire to do nothing, just to hang about in the sunshine and consume tobacco, then we should all have been much better off than we are now. But no, the doctrine of the strenuous life still went unchallenged; there must be no time wasted, something must be done. And, as we know, something was done. Again, suppose our statesmen, instead of rushing off to Versailles with a bundle of ill-digested notions and a great deal of energy to dissipate, had all taken a fortnight off, away from all correspondence and interviews and what not, and had simply lounged about on some hill side or other apparently doing nothing for the first time in their energetic lives, then they might have gone to their so-called Peace Conference and come away again with their reputations still unsoiled and the affairs of the world in good trim. Even at the present time, if half the politicians in Europe would relinquish the notion that laziness is a crime and go away and do nothing for a little space, we should certainly gain by it. Other examples come crowding into the mind. Thus, every now and then, certain religious sects hold conferences; but though there are evils abroad that are mountains high, though the fate of civilization is still doubtful, the members who attend these conferences spend their time condemning the length of ladies' skirts and the noisiness of dance bands. They would all be better employed lying flat on their backs somewhere, staring at the sky and recovering their mental health.

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People whose actions are devoid of good deeds, bring harm to the world. If activity alone was criteria of goodness, devil would have been the finest being in the universe. Not indolence, but actions in want of quality and direction are responsible for dilapidated condition of the world. In the past, wars and political miscalculations could have been avoided if politicians and statesmen had practiced restraint.

Inaction, even if practiced briefly by some politicians in contemporary Europe, could certainly benefit humanity. Similarly, meetings arranged by various religious organisation do not address the grave and gigantic problems faced by humanity; instead, participants in such meetings indulge in discussions over trivial subjects. Such kind of people will be better off resting at someplace than participating in worldly matters.

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Title: Indolence in Political and Religious Sphere – a panacea for Anarchy
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Indolence trumps actions in want of quality and direction

Seniors, please point out mistakes and shortcommings.

I don't know why senior memebrs have lost interest in guiding junior aspirants. Guiding somone is a very noble deed and there are plety of opportunities for doing this here at the forum.

Earlier, I had posted a Current Affairs topic regarding Indo-China conflict but, no one replied. If such state of affairs prevail, I fear, the forum will become redundant.

Again, I request everybody to please have a look at my precis and give comments.

You are right CSS Forum has become a dead forum. I will comment on your precis later, first I want you to read this original essay from where this paragraph has been taken

https://wastepaper.wordpress.com/201...j-b-priestley/

Come on guys, please review my precis

I wrote similar precis in the paper. I will apprise you of my result in a month InShaAllah.

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Presis written by you is good but it seems like you are trying to use very thick words just to show-off your vocabulary.You're trying so hard to impress the reader by using words alien to normal reader and while trying to do it, youve distorted the meaning you were trying to convey. just my two cents, no offense intended.

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Thanks for sparing time to comment on the precis. I really appreciate this.
I am not trying to impress the reader with heavy vocabulary. How can I impress someone with my vocabulary when I have not more than 100 words in my active vocabulary. I was just trying to avoid repetition of words as it is required according to rules of precis.

I have tried not to change original meaning of the paragraph while making precis but, I reckon, there is always room for improvement.

A bundle of thanks for your suggestions. Your two cents are very valuable for me.

I request you and other members to please post precis of this paragraph so that we can learn from each other.


Thanks.

NOTE: I have started a new thread for solved precis. I request all members to particiapate and comment on precis.

I promise, it will surely help us in brushing our wrting skills. The link to the thread is:

http://www.cssforum.com.pk/css-compu...ed-precis.html

the title of this passage is "on doing nothing"