Kindly Seniors, Evaluate my precis
 

All the evil in this world is brought about by persons who are always up and doing, but do not know when they ought to be up and nor what they ought to be doing. The devil, I take it, is still the busiest creature in the universe, and I can quite imagine him denouncing laziness and becoming angry at the smallest waste of time. In his kingdom, I will bet, nobody is allowed to do nothing, not even for a single afternoon. The world, we all freely admit, is in a muddle, but I for one do not think that it is laziness that has brought it to such a pass. It is not the active virtues that it lacks but the passive ones: it is capable of anything but kindness and a little steady thought. There is still plenty of energy in the world(there never were more fussy people about), but most of it is simply misdirected. If ,for example, in July 1914, when there was some capital idling weather, everybody-- emperors, kings, archdukes, statesmen, generals, journalists, had been suddenly struck with an intense desire to do nothing, just to hang about in the sunshine and consume tobacco, then we should all have been much better off than we are now. But no, the doctrine of the strenuous life still went unchallenged; there must be no time wasted, something must be done. And, as we know, something was done. Again, suppose our statesmen, instead of rushing off to Versailles with a bundle of ill-digested notions and a great deal of energy to dissipate, had all taken a fortnight off, away from all correspondence and interviews and what not, and had simply lounged about on some hill side or other apparently doing nothing for the first time in their energetic lives, then they might have gone to their so-called Peace Conference and come away again with their reputations still unsoiled and the affairs of the world in good trim. Even at the present time, if half the politicians in Europe would relinquish the notion that laziness is a crime and go away and do nothing for a little space, we should certainly gain by it. Other examples come crowding into the mind. Thus, every now and then, certain religious sects hold conferences; but though there are evils abroad that are mountains high, though the fate of civilization is still doubtful, the members who attend these conferences spend their time condemning the length of ladies' skirts and the noisiness of dance bands. They would all be better employed lying flat on their backs somewhere, staring at the sky and recovering their mental health.





Evils are introduced by the people without knowing when it should be active or doing.According to the writer,Devil is the busiest creature which criticizes laziness and infuriates over the wastage of time.Therefore,everybody is busy all the time in his kingdom.however, world is in confusion not because of laziness but it is not active virtue and has the ability to do anything except kindness and little steady thought with its misdirected energy.If in 1914,elite people had attracted toward laziness then world would be much better than that day but that concept compelled people to do something in working life.While in religious conference, people pay more attention to idle conversation instead of discussing important issues and such people would be need to improve their mental health.


"Laziness is not a curse but hidden blessing"

seniors, check it
 

kindly,seniors guide me well if there is any mistake in my precis.people in this group, make me confuse by giving their different arguments.some said precis should be in past tense some said its in a same tense as used in original passage. after lots of research on it, i confirmed its in a indirect sense and same tense as used in a original passage like if direct sense in a present and future tense then indirect will also in present and future sense there is no changing. only direct sense of past changed indirect sense.

its a bad experience for me to post anything on this website.

[QUOTE=Tooba2;1053416]All the evil in this world is brought about by persons who are always up and doing, but do not know when they ought to be up and nor what they ought to be doing. The devil, I take it, is still the busiest creature in the universe, and I can quite imagine him denouncing laziness and becoming angry at the smallest waste of time. In his kingdom, I will bet, nobody is allowed to do nothing, not even for a single afternoon. The world, we all freely admit, is in a muddle, but I for one do not think that it is laziness that has brought it to such a pass. It is not the active virtues that it lacks but the passive ones: it is capable of anything but kindness and a little steady thought. There is still plenty of energy in the world(there never were more fussy people about), but most of it is simply misdirected. If ,for example, in July 1914, when there was some capital idling weather, everybody-- emperors, kings, archdukes, statesmen, generals, journalists, had been suddenly struck with an intense desire to do nothing, just to hang about in the sunshine and consume tobacco, then we should all have been much better off than we are now. But no, the doctrine of the strenuous life still went unchallenged; there must be no time wasted, something must be done. And, as we know, something was done. Again, suppose our statesmen, instead of rushing off to Versailles with a bundle of ill-digested notions and a great deal of energy to dissipate, had all taken a fortnight off, away from all correspondence and interviews and what not, and had simply lounged about on some hill side or other apparently doing nothing for the first time in their energetic lives, then they might have gone to their so-called Peace Conference and come away again with their reputations still unsoiled and the affairs of the world in good trim. Even at the present time, if half the politicians in Europe would relinquish the notion that laziness is a crime and go away and do nothing for a little space, we should certainly gain by it. Other examples come crowding into the mind. Thus, every now and then, certain religious sects hold conferences; but though there are evils abroad that are mountains high, though the fate of civilization is still doubtful, the members who attend these conferences spend their time condemning the length of ladies' skirts and the noisiness of dance bands. They would all be better employed lying flat on their backs somewhere, staring at the sky and recovering their mental health.





Evils are introduced by the people without knowing when it should be active or doing.According to the writer,Devil is the busiest creature which criticizes laziness and infuriates over the wastage of time.Therefore,everybody is busy all the time in his kingdom.however, world is in confusion not because of laziness but it is not active virtue and has the ability to do anything except kindness and little steady thought with its misdirected energy.If in 1914,elite people had attracted toward laziness then world would be much better than that day but that concept compelled people to do something in working life.While in religious conference, people pay more attention to idle conversation instead of discussing important issues and such people would be need to improve their mental health.


"Laziness is not a curse but hidden blessing"[/QUOTE]

Do not write examples in precis .
Improve sentence structure
Practice Practice

Kindly giving me marks.
 

Thanku for checking it but as for as i remembered, i did not use any example in this passage.
Also give me marks on this so that i could know to want extant i improved or not.

[QUOTE=Tooba2;1053416]All the evil in this world is brought about by persons who are always up and doing, but do not know when they ought to be up and nor what they ought to be doing. The devil, I take it, is still the busiest creature in the universe, and I can quite imagine him denouncing laziness and becoming angry at the smallest waste of time. In his kingdom, I will bet, nobody is allowed to do nothing, not even for a single afternoon. The world, we all freely admit, is in a muddle, but I for one do not think that it is laziness that has brought it to such a pass. It is not the active virtues that it lacks but the passive ones: it is capable of anything but kindness and a little steady thought. There is still plenty of energy in the world(there never were more fussy people about), but most of it is simply misdirected. If ,for example, in July 1914, when there was some capital idling weather, everybody-- emperors, kings, archdukes, statesmen, generals, journalists, had been suddenly struck with an intense desire to do nothing, just to hang about in the sunshine and consume tobacco, then we should all have been much better off than we are now. But no, the doctrine of the strenuous life still went unchallenged; there must be no time wasted, something must be done. And, as we know, something was done. Again, suppose our statesmen, instead of rushing off to Versailles with a bundle of ill-digested notions and a great deal of energy to dissipate, had all taken a fortnight off, away from all correspondence and interviews and what not, and had simply lounged about on some hill side or other apparently doing nothing for the first time in their energetic lives, then they might have gone to their so-called Peace Conference and come away again with their reputations still unsoiled and the affairs of the world in good trim. Even at the present time, if half the politicians in Europe would relinquish the notion that laziness is a crime and go away and do nothing for a little space, we should certainly gain by it. Other examples come crowding into the mind. Thus, every now and then, certain religious sects hold conferences; but though there are evils abroad that are mountains high, though the fate of civilization is still doubtful, the members who attend these conferences spend their time condemning the length of ladies' skirts and the noisiness of dance bands. They would all be better employed lying flat on their backs somewhere, staring at the sky and recovering their mental health.





Evils are introduced by the people without knowing when it should be active or doing.According to the writer,Devil is the busiest creature which criticizes laziness and infuriates over the wastage of time.Therefore,everybody is busy all the time in his kingdom.however, world is in confusion not because of laziness but it is not active virtue and has the ability to do anything except kindness and little steady thought with its misdirected energy.If in 1914,elite people had attracted toward laziness then world would be much better than that day but that concept compelled people to do something in working life.While in religious conference, people pay more attention to idle conversation instead of discussing important issues and such people would be need to improve their mental health.


"Laziness is not a curse but hidden blessing"[/QUOTE]
(1: Avoid using negative sentences
(2: Don't borrow words from the original passage.
(3: Use one-word substitution.
e.g. not a curse but a blessing ( Blessing in disguise)
(4: lack of clarity and flow. work on it.
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