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Probably the only protection for contemporary man is to discover how to use his intelligence in the service of love and kindness. The training of human intelligence must include the simultaneous development of the empathic capacity. Only in this way can intelligence be made an instrument of social morality and responsibility- and thereby increase the chances of survival. The need to produce human beings with trained morally sensitive intelligence is essentially a challenge to educators and educational institutions. Traditionally, the realm of social morality was left to religion and the churches as guardians or custodians. But their failure to fulfil this responsibility and their yielding to the seductive lures of the men of wealth and pomp and power are documented by history of the last two thousand years and have now resulted in the irrelevant "God Is Dead” theological rhetoric. The more pragmatic men of power have had no time or inclination to deal with the fundamental problems of social morality. For them simplistic Machiavellianism must remain the guiding principle of their decisions - power is morality, morality is power. This over-simplification increases the chances of nuclear devastation. We must therefore hope that educators and educational institutions have the capacity, the commitment and the time to in-still moral sensitivity as an integral part of the complex pattern of functional human intelligence. Some way must be found in the training of human beings to give them the assurance to love, the security to be kind, and the integrity required for a functional empathy

Precis:
The dire need of humans to nurture the moral aspect of intelligence is crucial for their sustenance. To vivify this construct the pressure is on educational institutions. Previously this was the liability of the churches,but their velleity towards worldly gains indicated by the history resulted in people's disbelief in God. Similarly, politicians abrogated ethics to seize power. *Consequently, it is now up to the teachers to fabricate the virtuous tendencies in rational development of humans and sensitize practical intelligence to basic human emotions.
Title : moral intelligence - a key to human sustenance.

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[QUOTE=arooba usmani;1069322]Probably the only protection for contemporary man is to discover how to use his intelligence in the service of love and kindness. The training of human intelligence must include the simultaneous development of the empathic capacity. Only in this way can intelligence be made an instrument of social morality and responsibility- and thereby increase the chances of survival. The need to produce human beings with trained morally sensitive intelligence is essentially a challenge to educators and educational institutions. Traditionally, the realm of social morality was left to religion and the churches as guardians or custodians. But their failure to fulfil this responsibility and their yielding to the seductive lures of the men of wealth and pomp and power are documented by history of the last two thousand years and have now resulted in the irrelevant "God Is Dead” theological rhetoric. The more pragmatic men of power have had no time or inclination to deal with the fundamental problems of social morality. For them simplistic Machiavellianism must remain the guiding principle of their decisions - power is morality, morality is power. This over-simplification increases the chances of nuclear devastation. We must therefore hope that educators and educational institutions have the capacity, the commitment and the time to in-still moral sensitivity as an integral part of the complex pattern of functional human intelligence. Some way must be found in the training of human beings to give them the assurance to love, the security to be kind, and the integrity required for a functional empathy

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The dire need of humans to nurture the moral aspect of intelligence is crucial for their sustenance. To vivify this construct the pressure is on educational institutions. Previously this was the liability of the churches,[COLOR="Red"]but their velleity towards worldly gains indicated by the history resulted in people's disbelief in God[/COLOR]. Similarly, politicians abrogated ethics to seize power. *Consequently, it is now up to the teachers to fabricate the virtuous tendencies in rational development of humans and sensitize practical intelligence to basic human emotions.
Title : moral intelligence - a key to human sustenance.

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I think the title "Institutionalizing Morality" is more relevant in terms of given subject matter. Your precise is better. Why not good? Because you have written lengthy and complex sentences as well like original passage and included irrelevant aspects which are highlighted in red in your precise. You should make as simple sentences as possible. Order your sentences in a continuous flow.

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[QUOTE=highly uploaded;1069384]I think the title "Institutionalizing Morality" is more relevant in terms of given subject matter. Your precise is better. Why not good? Because you have written lengthy and complex sentences as well like original passage and included irrelevant aspects which are highlighted in red in your precise. You should make as simple sentences as possible. Order your sentences in a continuous flow.[/QUOTE]Thank you so much for your kind consideration.

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