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Saba Arif Saturday, June 15, 2019 07:58 PM

Let's prepare Precis
 
Precis writing group. Post your precis and take part in precis writing.

Saba Arif Saturday, June 15, 2019 07:59 PM

Make precis of this paragraph
 
One great defect of our civilization is that it does not know what to do with its knowledge. Science, as we have seen, has given us powers fit for the gods, yet we use them like small children.
For example, we do not know how to manage our machines. Machines were made to be man's servants; yet he has grown so dependent on them that they are in a fair way to become his masters. Already most men spend most of their lives looking after and waiting upon machines. And the machines are very stern masters. They must be fed with coal, and given petrol to drink, and oil to wash with, and must be kept at the right temperature. And if they do not get their meals when they expect them, they grow sulky and refuse to work, or burst with rage, and blow up, and spread ruin and destruction all round them. So we have to wait upon them very attentively and do all that we can to keep them in a good temper. Already we find it difficult either to work or play without the machines, and a time may come when they rule us altogether, just as we rule the animals.

Saba Arif Saturday, June 15, 2019 08:03 PM

Make precis of this paragraph
 
We all know what we mean by a "good" man. The ideally good man does not drink or smoke, avoids bad language, converses in the presence of men only exactly as he would if there were ladies present, attends church regularly and holds the correct opinion on all subjects. He has a wholesome horror of wrong-doing and realizes that it is our painful duty to castigate sin. He has a still greater horror of wrong thinking, and considers it the business of the authorities to safeguard the young against those who question the wisdom of the views generally accepted by middle-aged successful citizens. Apart from his professional duties, at which he is assiduous, he spends much time in good works: he may encourage patriotism and military training; he may promote industry, sobriety and virtue among wage earners and their children by seeing to it that failures in these respects receive due punishment; he may be a trustee of a university and prevent an ill-judged respect for learning from allowing the employment of professors with subversive ideas. Above all, of course, his "morals" in the narrow sense must be irreproachable. (189 words)

The dream of rain Sunday, June 16, 2019 08:51 AM

point out mistakes
 
[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092230]Precis writing group. Post your precis and take part in precis writing.[/QUOTE]

[CENTER][B][SIZE="4"]PASSAGE-2001[/SIZE][/B][/CENTER]
It was not from want of perceiving the beauty of external nature but from the different way of perceiving it, that the early Greeks did not turn their genius to portray, either in color or in poetry, the outlines, the hues, and contrasts of all fair valley, and hold cliffs, and golden moons, and rosy lawns which their beautiful country affords in lavish abundance.

Primitive people never so far as I know, enjoy when is called the picturesque in nature, wild forests, beetling cliffs, reaches of Alpine snow are with them great hindrances to human intercourse, and difficulties in the way of agriculture. They are furthermore the homes of the enemies of mankind, of the eagle, the wolf, or the tiger, and are most dangerous in times of earthquake or tempest. Hence the grand and striking features of nature are at first looked upon with fear and dislike. I do not suppose that Greeks different in the respect from other people, except that the frequent occurrence of mountains and forests made agriculture peculiarly difficult and intercourse scanty, thus increasing their dislike for the apparently reckless waste in nature. We have even in Homer a similar feeling as regards the sea, --- the sea that proved the source of all their wealth and the condition of most of their greatness. Before they had learned all this, they called it “the Unvintagable Sea” and looked upon its shore as merely so much waste land. We can, therefore, easily understand, how in the first beginning of Greek art, the representation of wild landscape would find no place, whereas, fruitful fields did not suggest themselves as more than the ordinary background. Art in those days was struggling with material nature to which it felt a certain antagonism.

There was nothing in the social circumstances of the Greeks to produce any revolution in this attitude during their greatest days. The Greek republics were small towns where the pressure of the city life was not felt. But as soon as the days of the Greeks republics were over, the men began to congregate for imperial purposes into Antioch, or Alexandria, or lastly into Rome, than we seek the effect of noise and dust and smoke and turmoil breaking out into the natural longing for rural rest and retirement so that from Alexander’s day …… We find all kinds of authors --- epic poets, lyricist, novelists and preachers --- agreeing in the precise of nature, its rich colors, and its varied sounds. Mohaffy: Rambles in Greece.

[B][SIZE="4"]PRECI:[/SIZE][/B]
[B][CENTER][SIZE="5"]The Greek Perception of the Nature and Their Art[/SIZE][/CENTER][/B]
The early Greeks had different perception regarding the beauty of nature. Therefore, it found no place in the early days of Greek art. The Greeks, similar to ancient people viewed nature as a resistance to the human and agricultural progress as well. They had regarded the wild landscapes of nature as foes of human beings. The fact came from the writing of homer who viewed sea as a waste of land. Moreover, the Greeks in the victorious days provided no change in their stance about the nature, because they led a life of rural setting with smaller towns. But, later, when their victorious days came to an end, the imperial life shadowed their former life. Thus, the beauty of nature found its place in the later days of the Greek art.

Saba Arif Monday, June 17, 2019 12:03 PM

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092232]One great defect of our civilization is that it does not know what to do with its knowledge. Science, as we have seen, has given us powers fit for the gods, yet we use them like small children.
For example, we do not know how to manage our machines. Machines were made to be man's servants; yet he has grown so dependent on them that they are in a fair way to become his masters. Already most men spend most of their lives looking after and waiting upon machines. And the machines are very stern masters. They must be fed with coal, and given petrol to drink, and oil to wash with, and must be kept at the right temperature. And if they do not get their meals when they expect them, they grow sulky and refuse to work, or burst with rage, and blow up, and spread ruin and destruction all round them. So we have to wait upon them very attentively and do all that we can to keep them in a good temper. Already we find it difficult either to work or play without the machines, and a time may come when they rule us altogether, just as we rule the animals.[205 words][/QUOTE]

[COLOR="Navy"][COLOR="Indigo"][B][U][I]TITLE: Humans and Machines[/I][/U][/B]
[I]Science has given knowledge and capabilities to humans but they do not know how to use them properly. Humans have become very dependent on machine for daily routine work and they are using machines for various purposes. Frequent use of machines has made machines master of humans and humans their servants. But Machine requires proper maintenance and get fed up. Without proper maintenance they can be disastrous to humans. [69 words]
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[COLOR="RoyalBlue"][B]Please suggest me correction or improvement if any.[/B][/COLOR]

Saba Arif Monday, June 17, 2019 10:51 PM

[QUOTE=The dream of rain;1092249][CENTER][B][SIZE="4"]PASSAGE-2001[/SIZE][/B][/CENTER]
It was not from want of perceiving the beauty of external nature but from the different way of perceiving it, that the early Greeks did not turn their genius to portray, either in color or in poetry, the outlines, the hues, and contrasts of all fair valley, and hold cliffs, and golden moons, and rosy lawns which their beautiful country affords in lavish abundance.

Primitive people never so far as I know, enjoy when is called the picturesque in nature, wild forests, beetling cliffs, reaches of Alpine snow are with them great hindrances to human intercourse, and difficulties in the way of agriculture. They are furthermore the homes of the enemies of mankind, of the eagle, the wolf, or the tiger, and are most dangerous in times of earthquake or tempest. Hence the grand and striking features of nature are at first looked upon with fear and dislike. I do not suppose that Greeks different in the respect from other people, except that the frequent occurrence of mountains and forests made agriculture peculiarly difficult and intercourse scanty, thus increasing their dislike for the apparently reckless waste in nature. We have even in Homer a similar feeling as regards the sea, --- the sea that proved the source of all their wealth and the condition of most of their greatness. Before they had learned all this, they called it “the Unvintagable Sea” and looked upon its shore as merely so much waste land. We can, therefore, easily understand, how in the first beginning of Greek art, the representation of wild landscape would find no place, whereas, fruitful fields did not suggest themselves as more than the ordinary background. Art in those days was struggling with material nature to which it felt a certain antagonism.

There was nothing in the social circumstances of the Greeks to produce any revolution in this attitude during their greatest days. The Greek republics were small towns where the pressure of the city life was not felt. But as soon as the days of the Greeks republics were over, the men began to congregate for imperial purposes into Antioch, or Alexandria, or lastly into Rome, than we seek the effect of noise and dust and smoke and turmoil breaking out into the natural longing for rural rest and retirement so that from Alexander’s day …… We find all kinds of authors --- epic poets, lyricist, novelists and preachers --- agreeing in the precise of nature, its rich colors, and its varied sounds. Mohaffy: Rambles in Greece.

[B][SIZE="4"]PRECI:[/SIZE][/B]
[B][CENTER][SIZE="5"]The Greek Perception of the Nature and Their Art[/SIZE][/CENTER][/B]
The early Greeks had different perception regarding the beauty of nature. Therefore, it found no place in the early days of Greek art. The Greeks, similar to ancient people viewed nature as a resistance to the human and agricultural progress as well. They had regarded the wild landscapes of nature as foes of human beings. The fact came from the writing of homer who viewed sea as a waste of land. Moreover, the Greeks in the victorious days provided no change in their stance about the nature, because they led a life of rural setting with smaller towns. But, later, when their victorious days came to an end, the imperial life shadowed their former life. Thus, the beauty of nature found its place in the later days of the Greek art.[/QUOTE]

[I][COLOR="Blue"]I have read you precis. It is wonderful. According to my perception their are some issues in your precis.
Your precis is not in general. You have quoted some same elements of the paragraph. You need to talk in general while writing. Like you quoted "agricultural" and "agricultural landscape" etc. You don't need to quote them. Just write in general.
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[B][CENTER]Title: The evolution of Greek natural Art.[/CENTER]
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[I]The ancient Greek did not give an importance to natural beauty of their country. Ancient people disliked the natural phenomena and occurrences and regarded them as disastrous to their existence. The Greek like other ancient people,also disliked natural art and did not take advantages of it. Homer had similar reaction to nature as they considered sea as a source of possible dangers before getting advantage of wealth of sea. At that time natural art of Greek was struggling. In these days there was no social interaction among the Greek. When their early days ended then social change commenced by the imperialism this can be noted by Greek authors in their writings[110 words]

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The dream of rain Tuesday, June 18, 2019 10:56 AM

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092230]Precis writing group. Post your precis and take part in precis writing.[/QUOTE]

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092313][COLOR="Navy"][COLOR="Indigo"][B][U][I]TITLE: Humans and Machines[/I][/U][/B]
[I]Science has given knowledge and capabilities to humans but they do not know how to use them properly. Humans have become very dependent on machine for daily routine work and they are using machines for various purposes. Frequent use of machines has made machines master of humans and humans their servants. But Machine requires proper maintenance and get fed up. Without proper maintenance they can be disastrous to humans. [69 words]
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[COLOR="RoyalBlue"][B]Please suggest me correction or improvement if any.[/B][/COLOR][/QUOTE]

Its good but lemme point out somethings i felt:
> the topic is about relationship of machines with humans. so there is not point to talk about [COLOR="Red"]"Science has given knowledge and capabilities to humans but they do not know how to use them properly."[/COLOR] (Irrelevant)
> Use past tense. avoid present tense. (skim DOs and DONTs of precis)
>Keep it up. your doing good. :))
P.S. Criticism is welcomed

Saba Arif Tuesday, June 18, 2019 02:57 PM

[QUOTE=The dream of rain;1092376]Its good but lemme point out somethings i felt:
> the topic is about relationship of machines with humans. so there is not point to talk about [COLOR="Red"]"Science has given knowledge and capabilities to humans but they do not know how to use them properly."[/COLOR] (Irrelevant)
> Use past tense. avoid present tense. (skim DOs and DONTs of precis)
>Keep it up. your doing good. :))
P.S. Criticism is welcomed[/QUOTE]

Okay. Let make a precise of this paragraph so that I can see how you fix issues you highlighted in my precis.

Innocent Hafeez Saturday, June 22, 2019 09:23 AM

Please check my attempt
 
[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092231]One great defect of our civilization is that it does not know what to do with its knowledge. Science, as we have seen, has given us powers fit for the gods, yet we use them like small children.
For example, we do not know how to manage our machines. Machines were made to be man's servants; yet he has grown so dependent on them that they are in a fair way to become his masters. Already most men spend most of their lives looking after and waiting upon machines. And the machines are very stern masters. They must be fed with coal, and given petrol to drink, and oil to wash with, and must be kept at the right temperature. And if they do not get their meals when they expect them, they grow sulky and refuse to work, or burst with rage, and blow up, and spread ruin and destruction all round them. So we have to wait upon them very attentively and do all that we can to keep them in a good temper. Already we find it difficult either to work or play without the machines, and a time may come when they rule us altogether, just as we rule the animals.[/QUOTE]

[B] Men and machines[/B]
Though science has enriched humans with immense knowledge, they are oblivious of using it for their benefits. They made Machines to serve them. But, instead of getting any advantage, they, like servants, engaged themselves in caring of their instruments, and completing their needs to avoid any damage. Their reliance on these self-made tools was to such an extent that it has enabled them to rule mankind in future. (Words 71)

Innocent Hafeez Saturday, June 22, 2019 09:28 AM

Please check my attempt
 
[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092232]We all know what we mean by a "good" man. The ideally good man does not drink or smoke, avoids bad language, converses in the presence of men only exactly as he would if there were ladies present, attends church regularly and holds the correct opinion on all subjects. He has a wholesome horror of wrong-doing and realizes that it is our painful duty to castigate sin. He has a still greater horror of wrong thinking, and considers it the business of the authorities to safeguard the young against those who question the wisdom of the views generally accepted by middle-aged successful citizens. Apart from his professional duties, at which he is assiduous, he spends much time in good works: he may encourage patriotism and military training; he may promote industry, sobriety and virtue among wage earners and their children by seeing to it that failures in these respects receive due punishment; he may be a trustee of a university and prevent an ill-judged respect for learning from allowing the employment of professors with subversive ideas. Above all, of course, his "morals" in the narrow sense must be irreproachable. (189 words)[/QUOTE]


[B] An ideal person[/B]
An ideal person spurns smoking and all sorts of bad habits. He speaks to others in mild words. He maintains optimistic views on all issues. He strives hard to promote his unchallengeable ethical ideas, and asks others to reject immoralities. Also, being morally educated, he opposes the appointment of ignoble and corrupt individuals, and demands the concerned elements to protect youth form them. (Words 63)


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